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Every word we put to paper comes from someone else. We learn from parents, teachers, books, movies, idle conversations - our entire life becomes our source material. The only thing that's original and unique is our choice of how we put the words together. To be 100% honest, we'd have to credit the Dictionary, Thesaurus, and Google for every poem and story. I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me! Only the author can take credit for the final words, no matter what the source.
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My co-workers used to call me a 'typo savant'. Apparently, I read letter by letter instead of word by word. This is both a gift and a curse. I am often distracted by a typo when I should just move on in the story.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Winchester Jones,

I came across your story at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

This is a well-written scene that seems very believable to me. The dialogue sounds natural. I could see it being part of a longer story about the life of Rama'a.

I did find a nit to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

In this line:

         The man’s eyes shown blue in its dancing light

the word 'shown' doesn't look right to my eye. Would 'shone' work better?


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of Whenever it rains  
Rated: E | (4.0)
PreciousBlack,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are many evocative images here of a rainy day washing the earth clean and the new beginnings that are possible when the storm clears.

I especially like the lines:

         After the heavenly spray,
         Watching the birds rejoice and play,

I do find some nits to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

In these lines:

         Though in the powerful wind the plants and trees thrashes,
         Like a little kids set yourself free,

the plural of 'thrashes' and 'kids' doesn't sound right to my ear, but it's a poem so your choice is ultimately correct.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Emma,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are expressive images here and a strong emotional content. Your poem opens a window for the reader to glimpse your pain, acceptance, and ultimate triumph.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of CHILDHOOD  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Vertika,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are many good images here to remind the reader of the joys of childhood. It's a fun poem with an upbeat ending.

I especially like the lines:

         we cannot differentiate
         between a stick and a straw.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of I saw it in you  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Naferet,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are many evocative images here that show the reader the strength of your passion. And yet the singular "When we entwined a night" creates some ambiguity and leaves us wondering and wanting to know more.

I especially liked the line:

         A snug of love’s haven

Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of The Rising Sun  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Seanfear,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are many evocative images here and it seems to work as well today as it did when you wrote it. Is your poem timeless or is that our troubles are endless? *Smile*

I especially liked these lines:

         Devastation,
         mounts of desperation,
         unconscious sensation,

The language flows well throughout the poem, the structure of the verses works for me, I don't find much to critique.

There is one line that I don't understand:

         passing the train off by.

but maybe that's just me.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of COLORS  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Joy,

I came across your story at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are many evocative images here that help the reader 'see' the old man. The tension between the theme of long-term love and the pain of secret knowledge makes for an interesting read. The intentional cruelty of playing 'their' song rings true to life, but his eventual acceptance and forgiveness lets the story end on a positive note. Good stuff!

The story is well written and the dialogue sounds natural to me.

I do find a nit to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

This line sounds odd to me:

"Not any impossibility exists from uniting the three of us in a higher realm."

I think I understand what you mean but I don't quite understand what you said.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Big Bad Wolf,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

Your words brought out my nostalgia for childhood wonder. I miss it, but I know too much as an adult to see the world as a child does. All that's left is to share the wonder of today's children as they discover the world. That's a pretty close second.

Your language flows nicely and the structure of the poem works well. I don't find anything to critique.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of False Arrest  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Chris,

I came across your story at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

My daughter was first diagnosed as bipolar in Germany. She spent weeks in a clinic there before I was able to 'rescue' her and bring her home, but she's doing well now.

I like that your story had a happy ending with the deputy being a decent guy. We need some positive images to help balance the bad news that seems so overwhelming.

I did find a nit to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

In the line:

         the manic highs were what drove me to to hitchhike

there's a double 'to'


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Christo,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are many evocative images here, it's a beautiful tribute to your friend and your friendship. Your language flows well and the structure of the verses seems just right. I don't find anything here to critique.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of Knock First  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Schnujo,

This is a good poem, short but sweet. It's also a nice intrepretation of the prompt. The image of barging through the door and then being locked inside works well for me.

The language flows well and the structure is well suited for the topic.

I don't find anything to critique.

Thanks for sharing,


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Review of I see you  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Happy to write,

Welcome to WDC!

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

This is a powerful piece that must have been painful for you to write. I applaud you for taking the risk of publishing it in a public forum.

I do find a nit to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

In the intro:

         when the truth is relieved

did you mean to say 'revealed'? Of course, it's a poem so your choice is ultimately correct.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Carly,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and really enjoyed reading it.

There are many evocative images here. I especially like "Where fog hangs
Like a depressed dog".

I think you fulfilled the prompt very well with this lovely poem. The lines flow well and the structure suits the subject.

I don't find anything to critique.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of A remote  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Bluebird,

Welcome to WDC!

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it. We would all like to have such a remote!

This is a good poem with a strong theme of regret. It flows well and the structure works well for the subject.

I do find some nits to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

In the line:

         If I have that power

the word 'had' might be better than 'have'.

In the line:

         My life will be ruled by me without antsy

I don't understand the word 'antsy' did you mean to say 'anxiety'?

Of course, it's a poem so your choices are ultimately correct.



Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of My old friend  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Doxx,

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are some strong images here that illustrate the struggle between what is wanted and what we wish was wanted. I liked the line about an inner vice screaming.

I do find some nits to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

In the line:

         Is there something special key that I hold?

the word 'something' doesn't sound quite right to my ear?

In the line:

         and some into inner vice keeps screaming

the word 'into' seems out of place to me?

In the line:

         Tonight will it be bottle one or bottle 2..

Did you mean to use a double period?

Of course, this is a poem so your choice is ultimately correct.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of Hiss Of The Snake  
Rated: E | (4.0)
MojaveMajik

I came across your poem at Read & Review and enjoyed reading it.

There are many evocative images here that illustrate the tension between what we want, what we need and which is the best choice.

I do find some nits to pick (because that's what I do best *Smile*).

In these lines:

         Look with your souls eyes
         See past the angels glow

you may have confused plural and possessive, but it's a poem so your choice is ultimately correct.

In this line:

         I will know not to look a the pretty face.

you may have meant 'at' instead of 'a'.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of His Chair  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Travellinda,

I found your poem on Read & Review and enjoyed it very much.

This is a touching tribute to someone whom you obviously loved very much. The poem is well written with a spare structure that is well-suited to the subject.

I don't really find anything to critique.


Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of My Friend  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dave,

I came across your poem on Read & Review and really enjoyed it. I hadn't heard of the Eintou form, so I learned something new as well. It seems to my untrained eye that you've successfully captured the form while my ear hears you saying something worthwhile.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of Radiating Romance  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Lou,

I came across this poem on Read & Review and really liked it. It's short but says everything that's needed to capture a special feeling. I like the line "Even the mud and puddles / somehow feel right."

Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Review of The Stars  
Rated: E | (4.0)
minhhquannn,

This is a good piece of reflective writing. I think you could easily expand on this theme.

Yes, I've wondered whether all the stars that we see here and now are still burning bright. Some of them may have already gone dark but we won't know that for another billion years.

My nits to pick:

maybe 'poses no difference to void' should be 'poses no difference from void'?

maybe 'forgotten to fill it is' should be 'forgotten to fill it in'?

Of course, this is your work so your choice is always correct. *Smile*

Keep writing!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Prosperous Snow,

I found this in Read & Review and enjoyed it very much. I hadn't heard this form before, so I also learned something new. I like your images and the phrase 'echoes of Eden' pairs well with 'sinfully rich'.

My only nit is the 's' on 'Beckons'. 'Beckon' sounds better to my ear. Of course, it's your poem so your choice is always correct. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Circles of light  
Rated: E | (4.0)
WordAddict,

This is a nice ode to a day in the woods. I could see the dappled tree trunks and the lush undergrowth illuminated by a distant sun. I like the comparison of bioluminescence in darkness with flashes of sun in dimness.

There is one line that doesn't sound quite right to me:

         each tree, bark, leaf, gravel sparkles in shimmer

Each is singular and gravel is plural, so 'each . . . gravel' doesn't sound right to my ear. Of course, it's your poem, so your choice is ultimately correct. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing and keep writing!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Miranda,

I've seen you popping up on the site a lot recently, so I thought I'd take a look. BTW, thanks for showing an interest my posts! *Smile*

I like this poem a lot. There are some strong images here, I especially like 'Our words are thinly veiled knives'. I agree that you are the dreamers, but you are also the dreams of those who came before and came up short.

Your hopeful tone is balanced nicely with the recognition of difficulties ahead. Keep in mind that history is cyclical, not linear. We progress by two steps forward and one step back (although it seems like three steps back right now). Evil exists to be overcome and there's always another evil waiting in the wings. Take satisfaction in the struggle more than in the victory.

Oh well, please forgive the pontificating . . .

Keep writing and stay positive,


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Review of Resignation  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Diane,

Good job on torching a not so good job. Talk about burning your bridges! I got several good laughs out of this piece.

Seriously, this is well written and a lot of it rings true for those who have experienced the corporate cubicle nightmare.

I once spent a couple of hours distributing my obsolete business cards among dozens of file folders in multiple filing cabinets. I'm sure they remembered me for years afterward!

I don't really find anything here to critique, so again, well done!

Keep writing,


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Kåre,

Well done!

I enjoyed reading this one. It gave me a smile, especially the first verse. I especially like: 'bought tickets for Hilo to hula'. That line has a great rhythm to it. Your structure and rhymes are all very good. The coffee/Kona juxtaposition is cleverly done.

The only line that tripped me up was: 'with stiletto at hand'. I don't associate stiletto with bread knife? But maybe I'm missing your point. *Smile*

Full disclosure, I had to click on anything from Missoula. I grew up near Flathead Lake and we visit our daughter in Missoula every summer. Then I saw the subject of your poem and laughed out loud. My wife just received a refund for her canceled trip to Hawaii that had been scheduled for last April.

Regards,


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