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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello,Sum1! I am here to review your poetry entitled "So Serene, So Still" . I'm not an expert writer but I will try my best to provide some useful reviews for you with an idea that is to help you in improving your work.

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

This piece is inspiring just like the picture you used as a prompt. I may not want to stop reading your poetry because it's interesting. I like the way you start your writing using the words up? or down? which come along at the end. Here you take the attention of the reader by questioning them in the first line and again at last. Good job! Your writing is clear and flowing well. Anyway I have only one suggestion that I think you need to consider it just to improve this piece 100%.

I think it's better if you change the word lead to led because you may have used one word when you meant another. A common cause of the error is homophones and that happen when two words that sound alike but have different meanings and spellings. Review the definition of the word you used and the word suggested.

Thank you very much for sharing your wonderful and inspiring piece with members of WdC.

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


God bless you,*ThumbsUp* luck and Write On*Exclaim*

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Review of Breaking Yoke  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, jimminy! I am here to review your story entitled "Breaking Yoke" . I'm not an expert in writing but I will try my best to provide some useful reviews for you with an idea that is to help in improving the work of other writers.

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

I try to read your poetry for better understanding and I see that it's deep in thought. It's short but very interesting, especially the second stanza. I like how it says in a rhyme. Good job! I also consider the use of the language and spelling but all went well in a flowing sequence. I will be very keen in reading this poetry if you add more some points and I'm sure you can do that in fact that you're creative.

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


Thank you very much for sharing your awesome piece with members of WdC.

God bless you and Write On*Exclaim*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I am reading this useful item>>>"How to make your sig"  written by my favorite author and fan Sticktalker in which he designed it with an idea that is it to help members of W.com, especially newbies, who are unfamiliar in using signatures around the site. However, the instruction in this article is flowing well in a sequence and that could possibly understood by readers who are reading it. I may recommend this article to every member who need help regarding sigs.

Thank you very much for writing this article for members of W.com.

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


God bless you and Write On*Exclaim*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Ozhan! I am here at your port trying to write my review for your piece, entitled "Report from America " 

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

I read your essay several times and it's a great piece as I read it. Anyway, I may help you in highlighting phrases that need a little consideration just to improve your writing. I see that something bothering me in the contents lolzz. It's not a big deal and you can see them *Down*

1. Consider My own family in line 2, I think it would be better if you erase the word own because you should avoid redundant expressions when possible. It has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase and I think if you eliminate that you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

2. You may also consider these words status quo in line 109 and replaced it with these words things as they are because I think Foreign words, jargon, and abbrevations will confuse those who don't know them and readers may skip phrases they don't understand. Help them out by using a plain term. I'm one of them in fact that English is my second language lol.

3. In line 145, there is a redundant expression again and it is better to remove the word possibly and leave the word could just to avoid redundant expressions.

4. You need to reword the word lady in line 161 and change it to woman because bias words and phrases may express gender, ethnic, or racial bias. These can turn people off. Therefore, bias-free language has the same meaning and treats people with respect. lol

Overall the piece is inspiring and I like it.

Thanks for sharing your essay with members of W.com.

Write On*Exclaim*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
StoryBob! How are you feeling now? I hope you are fine. Hope to talk to you again. First of all I apology for being late to get to your port. Anyway don't worry too much I am here now and I am going to do my job that is to review your piece "MY STORY - I CHOOSE TO BELIEVE" 

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

I read your story many times before I come up with what I think it would help in improving this piece of yours. Bob, I can tell that your story is inspiring and I may not want to stop reading this. It's very interesting.

Bob I may help you in highlighting a few phrases that need a little polish just to make it better to your reader. You may want to consider my own world in line 10. I think it would be better if you erase the word own and leave it like this*Right*my world because you should avoid redundant expressions when possible. It has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase. and I am sure that by eliminating the redundant expressions, you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

I suggest you to erase My Story and leave I Choose to Believe as the title of this wonderful story of yours.

Thank you Bob for sharing your wonderful story with us members. May the Good Lord bless you as He always did. *Smile*

You Rock*Exclaim* *Music1**Music2**Cool*

Write On*Exclaim*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Liam!

I'm now here at your port trying to give you a helpful review for your great story "I Heard My Father Laugh" 

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

This story is interesting and it's flowing well as I read it. Anyway, I have a very few suggestions in helping you to improve this piece. I know it's well crafted but there's something bothering me and that you can see in line 41. The word awhile could be fine if you separate it. For instance. for a while. And in line 61 the word onto. I think you should avoid redundant expressions when possible. A redundant expression has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase. By eliminating that you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

Thank you for sharing your inspiring story with members of W.com. I am very interested in reading you, Liam. Go reach for your stars.

You Rock*Exclaim* *Music1**Music2**Cool*

Write On*Exclaim*


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Review of pity party  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hey, LuisPadilla! I am here at the WdC Power 'Review me list' trying to write my review for your piece entitled "pity party" 

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

I read this piece and it's very interesting. It's flowing well from the start to the end just like a well constructed story. I like reading your poem. Good job*Exclaim* I also interested not in just reading you but in helping you too. *Smile*

I have a very few recommendation to you regarding this piece and that I want to share it with you below just to improve your writing. All I lists them*Down*

1. You may capitalize the title of your poetry.
2. You may need to rearrange your writing on the *Left* align.
3. I think the word answer should be answered and you can see that in stanzas 5, lines 2. In stanzas 9, lines 2 the word sank should be sunk
4. You may also need to rearrange your stanzas/verses and I think it would be great if you put 5 lines in each stanza.

Those I highlighted above for you just for better demonstration. Thank you very much for sharing your wonderful poem with us. I hope to see more from you soon. You Rock*Exclaim**Music1**Music2* *Cool*

*ThumbsUp*luck and God bless you.

Write On*Exclaim*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Power Reviewer! I am here at the WdC Power 'Review me list' trying to write my review for your piece "A Balance of Emotion" 

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

This is a wonderful and awesome short poem and I like it! (Laugh) Anyway, I think this piece is great and I see no error in it. It's flowing well and neatly written. Nice job!

I hope to see more like this one.

Good luck to you and God bless.

Write On!

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Review of New Year's Bash  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My review for "New Year's Bash" 

Well, I think this is one of the most inspiring birthday celebration, I've ever seen here at WdC, which is great! The birthday celebration involved other members who were here to show gratitude and support to you in your special day by sponsoring some of the packages included in this auction.

On the other hand, other members could benefit by having different kind of awards, from receiving a story review, gift points, merit badges and awardicon. I may tell that this is the most interesting part of your birthday celebration that will be held here, later this month. The birthday celebration is not only a fun time for you and your family and friends but it's also a way to help and encourage other members who will be here to use the services in this auction as part of your honored birthday.

You will find some gift points that I attach with my review, it's my offer just to support you in your honored birthday celebration.

Thank you very much for your time to create this auction for members of the WdC.

Good luck to you and happy birthday in advance.

Write On!

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Review of This is My Cry  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Pal,

I’m going to review this piece of yours entitled 'This is My Cry Invalid Review but anyway these are my opinions that I assemble in my review. You may disregard, if it’s doesn’t fit.

This poetry holds a powerful meaning which is very interesting. It’s well conveyed and that I could easily trace what this piece, trying to expressed here. Also, it’s flowed well and done nicely. Good job!

The stanzas/verses stand in a four lines which support this piece appeared precise. The second stanza delivered a powerful message to the couples and much interesting, how it said in a rhyme which I like it much.

We have to take an action
To the so-called over population
Hungry mouths need solution
Think now and make the right decision

I suggest you to link some punctuation to the last stanza. Keep up the good work and Write On!

Thank you very much for sharing your poem with members like me.

I am looking forward to work with you at the PDG Newbie Project, this coming July. Good luck and God bless you.

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Review of Who was Jesus?  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an interesting poll questions, but I rate it 4.5 because something bothering me and that might be some optional answers that I wish to see but it wasn't there.

Put up more poll questions like this one.

Thank you so much for sharing your poll *Smile*
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Review of Power words image  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This WDC POWER REVIEWERS image was good. I rate it 4.5 because I not much happy with green color. But good that I don't have problem with that. Done nicely by Legerdemain.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Upgraded and above Sig were all looking awesome and inspiring with nice animation and bright colors some of the image not bright in colors but overall all well. Love it!!!
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