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Review of My Church  
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Rated: E | (5.0)


Hello fyn !

I saw your case in the list of those who have an account birthday this month and thought I'd send you a review in celebrating your seven year at WDC.

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
This is a good poem with a nice topic that could take the attention of the reader, especially Christians.The topic is interesting and the content is well written.

*Sheriff* FLOW:
I did enjoy reading this piece because it flow reads very well, but the most I liked is the rhyme parts which I enjoy it very much because I'm a rap fan. You're good in playing with words. *ThumbsUp*

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
I liked all part of your stanzas, but the last stanza is my best:

Only God knows what he wants me to be
and I need no preacher to translate for me.
I know in my heart, I know in my soul
and that's all I can do; to work towards His goal.

I think those who really believe in God will trust the above thought. He is the only one who does know everything about us and things around us.

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I try to search for any technical errors here but nothing I could see. Bravo!

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I have no specific suggestion to you regarding this piece since it looks great the way it is.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your poem because it's very interesting in my opinion. Write more!

Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~

Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse ! I saw your case in the list of those who have an account birthday this month, and that's why I click on your case to enter your portfolio to review one of your pieces in celebrating your third year at WDC.

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* COMMENT:
Well, this contest is one of the best in my eyes. The banner above represents your creativity and style which I like. The forum setting is quite beautiful. The information on the page is very thoughtful and easy to read. The fonts, colors and emotions you used are quite eye-catching. Your style is rare, and I tell that just after watching your brilliant contest forum. I like the contest name that reads "A Poem A Day Contest." The contest proves that you are a busy man since your job is hosting, reviewing, judging and giving prizes to your contestants. Since you give so much effort in helping other authors in making this wonderful community the best, I should thank you for your effort so thanks for everything you do for us. You give so much to this wonderful writing community but the good news is that many have noticed your hard work and maybe that is the reason why your contest was listed in the 2011 Quill Nominations as of today. Congratulations to you my friend!

Keep up the amazing work and good luck in everything you do.


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~

Hello dennarich! I saw your case in the list of those who have an account birthday this month, and that's why I click on your case to enter your portfolio to review one of your pieces in celebrating your eighth year at WDC.

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* COMMENT:
Well, this contest is one of the best in my eyes. The banner above represents your creativity and style which I like. The forum setting is quite beautiful. The information on the page is very thoughtful and easy to read. The fonts, colors, and emotions you used are quite eye-catching. Your style is rare, and I tell that just after watching your brilliant contest forum. I like the contest name that reads "A Poem A Day Contest." The contest proves that you are a busy man since your job is hosting, reviewing, judging and giving prizes to your contestants. Since you give so much effort in helping other authors in making this wonderful community the best, I should thank you for your effort so thanks for everything you do for us. You give so much to this wonderful writing community but the good news is that many have noticed your hard work and maybe that is the reason why your contest was listed in the 2011 Quill Nominations as of today. Congratulations to you my friend!

Keep up the amazing work and good luck in everything you do.

Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of Heart O Gram  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~

Hello ~WhoMe???~ ! I saw your case in the list of those who have an account birthday this month, and that's why I click on your case to enter your portfolio to review one of your items in celebrating your sixth year at WDC.

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* COMMENT:
Well, I will just quick rate and review this image for you before I head up to the Comma Sense Forum. By the way, you have a great ability in designing images, and I tell that just after seeing this cute image. This image is much like those images in your shop. This shows your talent and creativity. The image itself is very inspiring. I liked the pink color with the word that reads "A Valentine Gift For You!" The red outline is also looks great and really match with the pink color background. Your price is very reasonable by the fact that designing a cNote is hard work. Maybe you could add more images to this cNote.

Thank you so much for giving so much to this wonderful writing community. Your help in many ways is very much appreciated by the WDC community.

Keep up the amazing work and write on! *Smile*

Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of The Quills Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Andrew,

This short review is meant to bring some donations to your worthy activity. Also, I would like to ask a question regarding your judge 🌕 HuntersMoon and his item. You know, I wanted to nominate his medium structured poem, "The Hourglass" . Can it get nominated or not?

Please allow some donations from me. Since your fund is much I will offer you some, but I will keep my eyes on your bank from now on!

Thank you very much for running and hosting such a wonderful, brilliant and worthy activity. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings ~*Arpita*~ ,

I'm here to review and rate your forum, "Let's help each other grow!-Forum-Closed"  in celebrating your 1st year at WDC.

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


Well, your forum page looks brilliant and appearing, since the font and colors you used are playing the role in shining the forum page so vivid. You got a great page, and this is because your creativity is shining bright like the star you are.

The information on the forum page is thoughtful and very informative, too. I liked the idea and I thought opening the group to all case colors on the site will bring more members to join in the fun here at your group.

The graphics on your forum page are fantastic. I hope you could add one to the top of your forum page.

Congratulations to you on your WDC account birthday!

Happy 2012! *Smile*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~


Hello Iva Lilly Durham ! I'm reviewing your piece, "Getting around WDC"  on behalf of the "Simply Positive Review Forum "  where you are listed as one of this week's selected reviewees.

NOTE:Please know that I'm not a professional reviewer, so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit.*BigSmile*


COMMENT:
Writing a piece with a variety of purposes is a great idea. This piece shows how you feel about the site and its stuff, including members. Also, it's very helpful to everyone around here, especially newbies because it could encourage them, not to give up in exploring the vast ocean of WDC, but to follow your way, in order to know about how to do stuff around. I remember when I was new here, most of the time, I was lost, in fact this site is huge and wide and maybe that's the reason why it's hard to explore. You talk from your heart in this piece and I can hear you and I know the others will also do.. Of course, your topic and presentation is very interesting.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
Below are some of my favorites:

Like those mice, we feel so far from the prize.

The above thought flow reads very well. You're a good rhymer, in my opinion.

At the end of the day, this is a BIG place with lots going on, wonderful poems and stories to read, inspiration for things to write and, best of all, friends including our Story Master and Story Mistress.

I liked the way you tell how you felt about the site and I think newbies will believe in you. To me, I agree with you on this thought, my friend. Also, including the SMs in your circle of friends is a good idea since they are very friendly and encouraging, too. All of all, your thought are real. It seems that you're a friendly kind old woman. *Smile*

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
There are few minor errors that I saw while reading your piece. I'll highlight them for you under my suggestion.

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
If I quote your writing, it'll be in blue, and red will show what I'd suggest for a section.

So you are new to WDC ... join the crowd! I mean, there are thousands of us here [,] rattling around like mice in a maze.
So you are new to WDC ... join the crowd! I mean, there are thousands of us here, rattling around like mice in a maze.

If an old gal [girl] like me can find her way, I'm sure you can [,] too.
If an old girl like me can find her way, I'm sure you can, too.

you most likely will get a reply or response.
you will most likely get a reply or response.

The best source [s] of all, in my opinion, are the registered users, those mostly friendly and helpful WDC members. *Right* Sentence fragment.
The best sources of all, in my opinion, are the registered users, those mostly friendly and helpful WDC members are very encouraging to every writer.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your article because it's very interesting and, especially it's very helpful to new members. Write more!


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Peace*A Review from Simply Positive Newbie Reviewers Group!*Peace*


Hello Red Writing Hood <3 ! I'm Metu and I'm reviewing your item, "The Children's Writer Group"  on behalf of "Anniversary Reviews" .


*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


I saw your case in the list of those who have an account birthday this month and I thought I should review and rate one of your items in celebrating your tenth year at WDC. *Smile*

I choose to consider this group of yours because this is the very first time I saw it and it's good to know that there's a Children's Writer group here at WDC. Now I can tell that those members of your group have the same interest which is writing literature of any kinds for children. I think I should try to learn how to write for kids too.

Well, the group information is easy to read but maybe you only need to add a little banner at the top, but I think there's no problem if there's no banner. *Smile*

Thank you for creating this group for members of WDC. Keep up the good work! *ThumbsUp*
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*PointRight*Write on!*PointLeft*

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Review of Your Life  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Hello Jenifer ! I'm Metu and I found your piece while searching new pieces at Read A Newbie and I thought I should review and rate it for you.

First, let me welcome you to the WDC family. I hope you find this as enjoyable an experience as I have.

I read this piece several times before I review it, trying to figure out what you're trying to express but, finally it becomes clear to me that this piece is a good lesson to all of us. You did great in expressing your opinion regarding life and the things that a man should do while he still alive. I'm impressed in reading this piece and I agree with most of your points here.

Anyway, I'm not just interested in reading your piece but I also wanted to help you in improving it for your reader. I will use the blue color to quote from the original text and the red color for my comment.

Life is short, death can hit you at anytime and you wouldn't ever know it.
Life is too short. Death can possibly hit you at anytime and you wouldn't ever know it.

Thats why you should get up off your couch and go on an adventure.
That is why you should get up off your couch and go on an adventure.

There are so many things you have never seen, the wold is vast and you must explore it.
There are so many things you have never seen, in fact that the world is vast.

If you spend your life sitting on your couch and then death comes get you, you will look back on your life and regret it.
If you spend your life time, sitting on your couch, you will regret when death comes and get you.

I think it would be better if you keep your writing precise. It could help you in avoiding run-on sentences and sentence fragments.

These comments are only my personal opinion. My suggestions are made in the spirit of making a good piece even better.


Write up and review on!

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Review of An avrage day  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Hello RedRiddingHood ! I'm Metu and I found your piece while searching new pieces at Read A Newbie and I thought I should review and rate it for you.

First, let me welcome you to the WDC family. I hope you find this as enjoyable an experience as I have.

Your thought in this piece are very clear and easy to read. I liked the impression because it shows your experience after school. This is a good piece but I think you need to polish some parts just to make it better for the reader. I will highlight some minor errors that I found for you below:

I think the title should be An Average Day instead of 'An Avrage Day'.

In line 4 the word 'out side' shouldn't be separated. It is one word.

In line 8 the word 'attempeted' should be attempted.

You used the phrase 'the suns light' in line 17 and I think it should be the sun's light.
Brief Explanation:
A possessive noun form says that the noun owns something. If the noun is singular and ends with s, z, or x you indicate possession with a single apostrophe at the end. If the noun is plural and ends with an s you use a single apostrophe at the end as well. Otherwise you indicate possession with an apostrophe s at the end of the word.

The phrase 'its not' you used in line 19 should be it's not.
Brief Explanation:
You may have used one word when you meant another. A common cause of these errors are homophones. A homophone is two words that sound alike but have different meanings and spellings. Review the definition of the word you used and the word suggested.

These comments are only my personal opinion. My suggestions are made in the spirit of making a good piece even better.


Write up and review on!

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Review of The WISHING WELL  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


Hello RICH ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ . I will be doing a review for the above poetry item in your port. This is a review for the"Invalid Item" . Please remember, a review is only how I, as an individual, see your piece. Accept what you agree with, ignore that which you disagree with.

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*NoteR* OVERVIEW:
I saw your case in the list of those who have a WDC account birthday this month and I thought I should review and rate one of your pieces because you are one of my friends that I haven't consider his work yet. Well, I notice that you aren't a poet and I tell that just after reading your bio. I think your try on poetry is good, making you a talented and creative poet. I read this poem several times before I review it and I found it very interesting and funny as well. I have some chuckles when I read the opening phrases, there was a little boy,so gay. You did a good job in trying to write this poem.

*NoteR* FLOW:
I read your poem and I found that it flow reads well. The most thing I like here is the rhyme parts. You did a great job in playing with words in this piece but there's some parts that bother me while reading. I will provide a comment on that under my suggestion for you to consider.

*NoteR* FAVORITE LINE(S):
Lines 29, 30 and 31 are my favorite parts:

I have to say, more wishes,
are available to the
young and old.

I agree with the above thought!

*NoteR* GRAMMAR/SPELLING:
Some punctuations were missing. I will highlight what I've found for you under my suggestion.

*NoteR* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to include some punctuations that should be included. The phrase below is just an example for better demonstration:

Once upon a time, they say
there was a little boy,so gay

I think you need to place a period just after the word gay. If you re-read this piece, you will see what I mean.

*NoteR* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a good poem and I did enjoy reading it because I thought this is your first try on poetry. Write on! *Smile*


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*ButterflyB* Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work! *ButterflyB*

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Review of Oldwarrior  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Oldwarrior !

I saw your case in the list of those who have a WDC account birthday, today and I thought I should tour your port. Well I fount that your port is a great place to visit because there are many items you have saved there. By the way, I will just quick review and rate this image for you because I'm impressed in watching it. This picture tells me that you are a retired soldier. You are looking great in wearing those uniforms. This picture of yours is very clear and look fantastic. I thank you for sharing it with us. *Smile*

Write up and review on!

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Review of Smiles  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~


Hello Barbiedoll !

I'm reviewing your piece, "Smiles" . Have a good day and keep writing!

*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* OVERVIEW:
I read your poem and I found that it's interesting. You let the world knows about you here. Well, thanks for writing and sharing this, now I know that you only love the one who have a smile on their faces, What about the rest? This is a good piece and I enjoy reading it.

*Writing* FLOW:
This peace flow reads well as I read it out loud.

*Writing* FAVORITE LINE(S):
The lines below are my favorite:

Most of all I love the
Smiles that come from
the heart

I'm glad to know that and now I will keep on smiling anytime I give you a review. Keep smiling! *Smile*

*Writing* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I try to search for any errors in this area but nothing I could see.

*Writing* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to place the period at the end of the last line.

*Writing* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your poem about smile and now I know that you are the one who love to smile. Write more!


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of Berserk  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A "SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWERS GROUP"  REVIEW


Hello Jaeff | KBtW of the Free Folk ! I'm Breaker and I'm reviewing your piece on behalf of the Simply Positive Forum where you are listed as one of this week's selected reviewees.

NOTE:Please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit.*BigSmile*


*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star*


OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I read this piece several times before I review it and I found that this is a sad story about a criminal or what. I can't believe when he kicked out the children and punch the brave mother in the nose lol. Is this a real event? I did enjoy reading this story.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I came across few words that I think you should consider. Read them under my suggestion *Down*.

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
You should avoid the phrase, 'twists and turns' you used in the first paragraph.

Brief Explanation:
Cliches are phrases used so much they lose their original power. Try revising the meaning of this phrase using your own words. It will make a stronger impact on your reader.

I would include the dash in 'sugarcoated' you used in the sixth paragraph. It will look like this *Right* 'sugar-coated.

I'm not familiar with the word, 'chrro.' Is that a technical term related to something?

I would also add the verb 'are' to this phrase *Right* 'You listening to me?'

*Star* *Star* *Star*


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of She  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~



I'm reviewing your piece, "She"  in celebrating your first year at WDC.


*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* OVERVIEW:
I read your poem several times before I review it and I found that it's very interesting because it shows that you are a kind of man, whose heart is filled with strong emotional love and care. Your message in this piece is so strong and can be very touching, especially to your wife, who you wrote this piece for. Your description and thought are very clear and I thank you for showing your inner heart to us. Your idea of writing this piece is very significant and I know it could be a good lesson to the couples. I haven't got the experience but I think I learn a lot just by reading this piece. I'm glad to find this poem at your port because now, I've gotten a great treasure and will add it to my treasure box of knowledge. Thank you very much!

*Writing* FLOW:
I did enjoy reading this piece because it flow reads very well from the beginning to the end.

*Writing* FAVORITE LINE(S):
All parts of your poem are my favorite because the thought are very inspiring to me, but the last stanza took much of my attention:

Two children later,
and she is more beautiful today,
than she was the day we met.

This shows how you feel about her and I think she should be proud because she is a real jewel in your heart. This thought shows real love and care.

*Writing* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I'm not just enjoy reading your piece but I also wanted to help you in improving it but it clears that you really don't need help on this and I tell that by reading this piece. It shines so bright with no errors that I could see. Bravo!

*Writing* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I can't think of anything to help you in improving your poem since it standout to me.

*Writing* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your poem because it's very interesting and I thank you for writing this piece in dedication to your wife. I'm very inspired in reading your poem because it shows the real you. I hope your wife will happy till forever. Write more!


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of Buwan  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Equilibrium !

I came across your case in the list of those who have a WDC birthday account this month and that's why I direct to your port to drop some comments. The title of this poem took my attention because I thought it so strange to me. Well I go through this poem and I found it very interesting to read because it's well penned. It also follow reads well as I real it aloud. I'm inspired in reading it and I'm glad that I found a very new word while reading it. Now the title makes sense to me and I know that the term,Buwan refers to the moon. You did a good job here.

I have only one suggestion for you and you can see that in line 5. I would remove the word, every to make that statement reads well. If you could remove it, it will stand this way *Right* and taste the rain in its blade.


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Review of Just Stay  
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Hello Proud Father !

I came across your piece in read a newbie. I thought this piece is quite toughing to the one you meant this thought to her. The thought is very clear and easy to understand. It also flow reads well from the beginning to the end. I search for any grammatical errors but nothing I could see here. You did a great job here and I thank you for sharing this with us. Keep the pen inked.


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Review of Sports Arena  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hello NanoWriMo2018 Into the Earth !

Wow I like your idea of creating this online sport arena for members of WDC. I think those who are interested in any kinds of sport will want to come and post about them and their games here. I did like this too because I love to play games. My favorite games includes, basketball, tennis, badminton, volleyball and soccer. I'm glad to found this sport arena forum at your port today. Have fun with your visitors and keep up the good work.


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Review of The Snow Fence  
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Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating !

This guestbook of yours is very welcoming to your visitor. The information here are so precise and the picture is cute. The fonts and colors you used here are also very clear and that make the information easy to read. Thank you for sharing this great guestbook with us. I don't have much to say on this since the information is brief but all I can say is that this guestbook is one of the best in my opinion.


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Review of Running away.  
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Hello Solaris LeRouche !

I came across your piece while searching newbies corner and I thought I should review and rate this piece for you because no one ever do the job. I'm glad that I found it because now I'm going to work it out.

This piece sounds so sad to me because I wanted to be with my family and friends. I don't like missing them and that's why I'm sad in reading this piece. I know that missing someone or something is not easy but sometimes you have no choice but to leave. I remember when I was a young boy, I was sent away from home to attend a boarding school away from my home. I thought my dad hates me that time but later I realize that he wants me to learn for my future.I really enjoy reading this piece. It also flow reads well as I read it. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. *Smile*

I have one suggestion for you that I think it could be helpful in improving this piece. You can see that below:

A girl is crying out front, obviously lost.

I think it would be better if you throw the word in before the word, front in line 6.


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Review of Back to Reality  
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Hello Annatheb !

I just saw your piece in read a newbie and I thought I should review and rate it for you because the title is sound interesting to me. I notice that you are expressing your feeling here about your love. Your thought in this piece are clear and easy to read. and that why's I enjoy reading it.

I notice that this is a poetry and I think it would be better if you arrange your thoughts in a stanza. That is just my suggestion for you. Keep the pen inked.


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Hello Bear Hunter !

I'm here at your port and I found this Radiohead Lyrics Crossword Puzzle. What a creative crossword you created here! I like your idea of creating it because it could be a game for pleasure to anyone who are interested. The most important of this crossword in my opinion is that it could help a player in improving his critical thinking. This is a wonderful idea and I'm glad to be the first to review and rate it for you. Thank you for creating this creative crossword puzzle for members of WDC.


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Review of Trusting Them  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Tim Chiu !

I'm reviewing your piece, "Trusting Them"  as part of "Over the Rainbow POWER Raid!" . Have a good day and keep writing!


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* OVERVIEW:
You reviewed my poem yesterday and that's why I'm here to return the favor. I read this piece several times before I review it and I found it very interesting. Trusting a person is part of life but sometimes it could lead you to hell.

*Writing* FLOW:
I did enjoy reading this piece because it flow reads very well but the most I liked is the rhyme parts which I enjoy it very much because I'm a rap fan. You're good in playing with words. *ThumbsUp*

*Writing* FAVORITE LINE(S):
Lines 2, 4, 9 and 10 are my favorites and you can see them below:

True friend or flake, do I need a salt shaker?
On my small, idle chatter to somehow get by?
A world without feelings, so calm, do I trust them?
So distant, yet wise, how long have I cussed them?

Questioning the reader is a wise idea because you not let yourself talk but you also let them think of the questions you came up with in this piece. I think your readers could inspired just by reading this and maybe they will reply you. Who knows? lol

*Writing* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I try to search for any technical errors here but nothing I could see. Bravo!

*Writing* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider the phrase, 'status quo' you used in line 15.

Brief Explanation:'
Foreign words, jargon, and abbrevations will confuse those who don't know them. Your readers may skip phrases they don't understand. Help them out by using a plain term. Maybe you can replace 'status quo' with 'things as they are.'

*Writing* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your poem because it's very interesting in my opinion. Write more!


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of Fear  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Sweet !

I'm reviewing your piece, "Fear"  as part of "Over the Rainbow POWER Raid!" . Have a good day and keep writing!


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* OVERVIEW:
Your thoughts in this piece are clear and easy to read and I thought I agree with all your points. Well I thought this piece is related to halloween but as I go through it, I found that it related with love.You did great in expressing your feelings in this piece. Well done!

*Writing* FLOW:
I did enjoy reading this piece because it flow reads very well. They rhyme is good as well which I like it.

*Writing* FAVORITE LINE(S):
I like the last line much:

How should I remind you….

That's a good thought because it could grab the attention of the one you're talking to, and maybe he will tell you how! lol

*Writing* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece but I don't notice any errors from the beginning to the end.

*Writing* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
If you could end the last line with a question mark, I think it would be better. That is my only suggestion for you.

*Writing* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your poem because it's very interesting and touching as well. Write more!


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of The Dialogue 500  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A "Contest Central Station"  Review
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Your contest was listed in "Invalid Item" , making you one of this week reviewees. I think you should be proud for that, my friend. Keep smiling! *Smile*


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*Hand* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Running a contest for members of WDC is a good job because that's the great way in challenging writers to come up with their entries to compete for the prizes. You did an awesome job in encouraging writers to write here.

*Hand* FORMAT:
You are so creative in formatting this contest page because you used the fonts and colors that are easy to read. The graphic is awesome and inspiring.

*Hand* REGULATION/PROMPT:
The rules and prompt are challenging and I think that what a real contest should set to its contestants.

*Hand* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I don't see any errors in this area. You did a groovy job!

*Hand* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I can't think of any suggestions for you since your contest is good.


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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