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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Raid Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~


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I'm reviewing your piece, "On Halloween Night"  as part of "Over the Rainbow POWER Raid!" . Have a good day and keep writing!


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* OVERVIEW:
Wow! Your poem reminds me of the movie, A Virgin Among The Living Dead. Have you ever seen that movie? Zombies rise and walk in a gang searching for people in needing their blood. That's so nasty. I enjoy reading this piece because it so real.

*Writing* FLOW:
This piece flow reads well and the rhyme is good as well.

*Writing* FAVORITE LINE(S):
All parts of the second stanza are my favorites:

Are those zombies knocking at our doors?
Are they looking for our brains or sweet treats?
Do they want chocolate covered apple cores?
Do they prefer healthy fruit or sweets?

Questioning your reader is a wise job and maybe one of your reader will write you a reply, especially those who knows the answer to your questions. lol

*Writing* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I searched for any technical errors here, but nothing I could see.

*Writing* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider the word 'onto' you used in line 11.

Brief Explanation:
You should avoid redundant expressions when possible. A redundant expression has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase. By eliminating that expressions you will make your writing more clear and concise to your reader

*Writing* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your poem because it's very interesting but I thought people might panic if they read it. Write more!


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Review of Undead Comedy  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Raid Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~


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Hello spidey !

I'm reviewing your piece, "Undead Comedy"  as part of "Over the Rainbow POWER Raid!" . Have a good day and keep writing!


NOTE: Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


*Writing* OVERVIEW:
My heart is beating so fast while I'm reading your poem. I remember the movie, Zombie walk, one of the most scaring movie, I've ever watched. You did a great job here in painting a snapshot of zombies which I enjoy reading it.

*Writing* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

*Writing* FAVORITE LINE(S):
All parts of the first stanza are my favorites:

Smells of decay waft through the darkened theater,
Mingling with fresh buttered popcorn.
Munch, crunch, chew -
The popping and grinding noises mask the screams
Coming from the screen.
They pretend the popcorn is brains,
And it almost works.

It sounds so scary to me and also it's penned nicely with appropriate words. It's a nice thought!

*Writing* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I see no errors in this area. Nicely done!

*Writing* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I don't have a suggestion for you since your piece is good.

*Writing* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your scary poem about zombies. Write more!


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Megan, my friend!

I'm at your port today, reading some of your impressive pieces. While I'm here, I found this creative forum and I thought I should review it for you. What a great designs and paints I just saw here. You are a wonderful painter. I'm impressed in watching those beautiful images. They are all inspiring and I liked them all, especially the last image which is my favorite because I'm a cat lover. *Smile*

Keep up the creative work and write on!

*SuitHeart*
~~Breaker

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Review of TRAIL OF TEARS  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Monthly Power Raid Review
09/23/11


A "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Review
by Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~

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Since 08/04/11


September Raid Theme:
Autumn or Native American.



I just saw your piece, "TRAIL OF TEARS"  in "Over the Rainbow POWER Raid!"  and I thought I should review it for you. Enjoy your day and keep smiling like I! *Smile*


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*Writing* OVERVIEW:
The content of this poem is factual but sound sad. Very well written, too. You remind me of the movie 'The Last of the Mohicans' one of my favorites film. You got a good subject here. *Smile*


*Writing* FLOW:
As I read this piece aloud, I hear it flows, since the choice of words is good.


*Writing* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I don't see any errors in this area. Nice job!


*Writing* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider the word 'onto' you used in line 11.
Brief Explanation:
You should avoid redundant expressions when possible. A redundant expression has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase. By eliminating redundant expressions you will make your writing more clear and concise to your reader.


*Writing* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a good piece and I enjoyed reading it from the beginning to the end because it reveals the past events. Write more!



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09/23/11


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Review of Heartbeat  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Hello Jimbo ! I'm Breaker and I'm reviewing your piece on behalf of the Simply Positive Forum where you are listed as one of this week's selected reviewees.

Please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*


*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star*


OVERVIEW:
I'm not a fan of love poetry but I have to review your piece to honor your creativity.

FLOW:
As I read this piece aloud, I hear it flows, since the choice of words is good

FAVORITE LINE(S):
I like the first line of the second stanza because the thought is sound so sweet lol

Your city shines as bright as the sun

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I don't see any errors here. Nice job!

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I have no suggestion for you this time since your piece is good. You better keep this piece in your port for the others to read it. *Smile*

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Nice impression. The word choice is good because it support your content.The metaphor you used is wonderful as well. Write more!


*Star* *Star* *Star*


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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hello Harry ! I'm Breaker and I'm reviewing your piece on behalf of the Simply Positive Forum where you are listed as one of this week's selected reviewees.

Please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*


*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star*


OVERVIEW:
Your subject is very good and I agree with your thought in this piece. It shows that you aren't comfortable with the high temperature in your country. High temperature is related to Global Warming and many scholars confirmed that in their reports. We, the new generation are facing this new humanity tragedy so we really need help here.

FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
The first, second and third lines of the last stanza is my favorite parts:

My, oh, my, but Shreveport is super hot,
extremely dry this summer of 2011.
Much of the nation also suffers.

I agree with this thought very much and you are right! All nations also suffers from the consequences of Global Warming and high temperature is one of it.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I saw no problems in this area. Nicely done!

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I will quote your writing, it will be in blue, and red will show what I would suggest for a section.

It would be better if you erase the dash you placed after 102-. I think there's no need of it.

You should consider the phrases, all-time record in line 32 and 37. You can try the word record and erase the word all-time. You should avoid redundant expressions when possible because it has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase and by eliminating that expressions you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Good poem with a premise that concerns all of us with things around us as well.Thank you for writing this good poem. I also have a poem related to Climate Change. Feel free to check it out if you want "Global Heartbreak" 

*Star* *Star* *Star*


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Review of Empty Tracks  
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Hello James A. Osteen Jr. ! I'm Breaker and I'm reviewing your piece on behalf of the Simply Positive Forum where you are listed as one of this week's selected reviewees.

Please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*


*Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star* *Star*


OVERVIEW:
Writing a piece in dedication to someone or something very special on a different occasion is a common practice and I thank you for your time to write this wonderful piece in dedication to the lady locomotive. I know that missing something that you liked is not easy.

FLOW:
I read this piece out loud several times to see how it goes and I found that it reads well but few words bother me while reading. I will highlight those words for you under my suggestion.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
Lines 4, 5 and 6 in the last stanza are my favorites:

won't fill the place
inside the heart
that she once occupied.

I think the above phrases is the reason why you wrote this piece. lol

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
You should consider this phrase 'Its sad to see,' in the first line of the third stanza. I think it would be better, if you try it's sad to see.
You may have used one word when you meant another. A common cause of these errors are homophones. A homophone is two words that sound alike but have different meanings and spellings. Review the definition of the word you used and the word suggested.

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to use the word woman instead of the word 'lady' in line 10.
Bias words and phrases may express gender, ethnic, or racial bias. These can turn people off. Bias-free language has the same meaning and treats people with respect.

You should consider the phrase 'left behind' in line 20 because that's a redundant expression. Try left and erase behind because should avoid redundant expressions when possible. It adds no new meaning to the phrase and by eliminating that expression you will make your writing more clear and concise to your reader.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a good piece and I enjoyed reading it because it's very interesting. Write more! *Smile*


*Star* *Star* *Star*


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Review of He is the Bandit!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Bandit's Mama ! This is a special review for you in remembering 9/11. I do some searches about you and I confirmed that you are one of the victims of the unexpected tragedy of September, 11 2001. Keep in mind that you will always be in the heart of WDC's family forever. May your soul rest in peace, forever!


*Man* *Woman* *Man* *Woman* *Man* *Woman*

*Earth* *Sad* REMEMBERING 9/11 *Sad* *Earth*
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*Woman* *Man* *Woman* *Man* *Woman* *Man*




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*Sheriff* COMMENT:
Hey Sandy! I know you might want to read my comment about Bandit, the one who always taking care of your household. I know he already turned 18 years old but sadly he missed you already. I believe that he continues, taking care of your home because he loves you very much. Sandy! I will send you a merit badge on behalf of Bandit to prove that he loves you very much. *Smile*

About our wonderful community, it's growing bigger and bigger with full of happiness and that's why we always have a lovely smile on our faces. I hope you are happy with angels above just like we did here at WDC. Remember, you always in the heart of WDC, forever!

*Shamrock* *Shamrock* *Shamrock*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
A "SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWERS GROUP"  REVIEW


Hello Robin:TheRhymeMaven ! I'm very exited to review this item for you but please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*

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*CupcakeY* HAPPY 11TH BIRTHDAY, WDC! *CupcakeY*

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OVERVIEW:
This piece is very interesting and I think, I agree with your thought. *Smile*

FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well. The rhyme is very good as well.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
{c:blackAll lines of the last stanza are my favorites:

I’ll just have to wait
To find out my own fate,
Who knows what God’s will is for me…
There is one thing I’ll buy –
When it’s my time to die –
My soul will have freedom to see…

That's true! All should wait to see what will happen.*BigSmile*

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece but good news, I don't notice any signs of errors from the beginning to the end.

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider this phrase *Right* my own fate in line 20. I think it would be better if you erase the word own because you should avoid redundant expressions when possible. A redundant expression has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase and by eliminating that you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your thought in this piece is good because the topic is also related to mankind and the next life. Write more!


*Star* *Star* *Star*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
A "SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWERS GROUP"  REVIEW


Hello Robin:TheRhymeMaven ! I'm very exited to review this item for you but please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*

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*CupcakeY* HAPPY 11TH BIRTHDAY, WDC! *CupcakeY*

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OVERVIEW:
This piece is very interesting and I think, I agree with your thought. *Smile*

FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well. The rhyme is very good as well.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
All lines of the last stanza are my favorites:

I’ll just have to wait
To find out my own fate,
Who knows what God’s will is for me…
There is one thing I’ll buy –
When it’s my time to die –
My soul will have freedom to see…

That's true! All should wait to see what will happen. *BigSmile*

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:


SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider this phrase *Right* my own fate in line 20. I think it would be better if you erase the word own because you should avoid redundant expressions when possible. A redundant expression has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase and by eliminating that you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your thought in this piece is good because the topic is also related to mankind and the next life. Write more!


*Star* *Star* *Star*


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Review of Railway to Heaven  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A "SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWERS GROUP"  REVIEW


Hello tlsea ! I'm very exited to review this item for you but please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*

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*CupcakeY* HAPPY 11TH BIRTHDAY, WDC! *CupcakeY*

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OVERVIEW:
I'm very glad to offer you my view regarding this piece because you are trying to picture the event that no one could ever seen. I'm wondering to read this piece about crossing from this world to the next. This is a great topic and I applaud the effort. *Smile*

FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
Lines 1 to 5 of the first stanza are my favorites:

Profoundly sleeping, having wrestled
Life’s harsh battles, evermore.
Hard earned wisdom, his child eyes see
Heavenly pleasures from kindness’ hoard…
Sleeping with beloved train toys, still in hand from day before.

It reads good. *Smile*

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
The word 'toots' in line 20 should be singular because that word is a non-countable noun.

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
If this poem were not as long it would be a great poem.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is interesting because the topic is so odd to me. Thanks for the read. Write more!


*Star* *Star* *Star*


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Review of LIFE  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Puja ! I'm very exited to review this item for you but please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*

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*StockingR*OVERVIEW:
I think I'm agree with your points here and that's why I want to review this poem for you.

*StockingR*FLOW:
This piece would flow much better if you remove all the unnecessary spaces in each stanzas. The spaces between each stanza broke into the flow of the poem when I read it.

*StockingR*FAVORITE LINE(S):
All lines in the first stanza are my favorites:

Life is a beautiful song,

with people around to sing along.

Life is a majestic chariot,

with the soul to hold the lariat.

because it's a nice thought and it sounds good.

*StockingR*GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I searched for any errors but I couldn't find any. Good Job!

*StockingR*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I recommend you to consider my comments I wrote under 'Flow' HEADING.

*StockingR*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I enjoyed reading your poem and I thank you for your time to write this wonderful piece about life. Write more!

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*Moon* Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work! *Moon*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
A "SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWERS GROUP"  REVIEW


Hello elizjohn ! I'm very exited to review this item for you but please know that I'm not a professional reviewer so no matter what my rating or comment may seem to imply. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work so don't be shy to disregard any comments as you see fit. *BigSmile*

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OVERVIEW:
I'm very glad to offer you my view regarding this piece. Well, this piece is good and I admire your subject because it's new to me. Nice topic! *Smile*

FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well. The rhyme is very good as well.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
Lines 4, 5, 6 and 7 are my favorites:

To be
That is the question
I ponder so heavily
I ponder so wearily….

It sounds good!

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I found just one error and you can see that under my suggestion.

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to place the period/full-stop at the end of the last stanza.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is very clear and interesting because the subject is good. Write more!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Rick H ! I will be doing a review for the above item in your port. Please, keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
I read this poem before I offer you my view and I notice that this poem is something related with love but honestly I'm not a fan of love poetry because I'm a guy. *BigSmile*

*Sheriff* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well. The rhyme is very good as well.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
The last stanza is my favorite:

You can tell him before, tell him during
Yet still he will fall with all of its luring
He’ll lay there burnt; shake, and quiver
Still every time he’ll go to come hither.

because it sounds good. *Smile*

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I searched for any errors but I couldn't find any. Good Job!

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I have no suggestions for you because your piece is good.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is good for the girls. Write more!

*Shamrock* *Shamrock* *Shamrock*


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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
I read your poetry to try to figure out what you were saying and I found that it's interesting because I think this piece shows a real thing that had happened to you in real life. Good subject!

*Sheriff* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
Lines 17 to 20 are my favorites:

I came out of
My golden lamp
Tried to apologize
But all fingers pointed at me

How come you came out with a gift and all of them pointed you with their figures? That's not good.

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece but good news, I don't notice any signs of errors from the beginning to the end.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I have no suggestions for you this time since your piece is good.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is wonderful and interesting and I have some chuckles in reading this. Write more! Lastly but not the least, I congratulate you on your account birthday. You rock!

*Shamrock* *Shamrock* *Shamrock*


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This group is one of the best, I know. The banner, the font color are so fantastic and that make the information very clear and easy to read. The helpful links for members, especially new comers is a great idea to post it on the group home page and I'm sure any member will find the answer to any of their questions there. That's a great idea! Awesome group, Maryann! Keep up the good work cause you are very much appreciated. I thank you for creating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for members of WdC. Write on, review on and good luck! You rock!

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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
I found this piece at your port and I thought I should review it for you because it shows your creativity and that's why I want to consider it. Between that I'm glad to be the first to review it. Yay! *BigSmile*

*Sheriff* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE PART(S):
Below is my favorite :

W Writer. This is where her passion lies and has since childhood.

The above sentence told me the reason why you are here and that because writing is your passion, eh? *Smile*

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece and I found just a few but I will list them for you under the 'Suggested Improvement' HEADING. *Down*

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I will post the original text and highlight the error in red. I will use the blue color for my comment(s).

I Intense. Its all or nothing with this Scorpio. When she loves she loves and when she hates…ya better get out of town and hide!
Try "It's or it is". You may have used one word when you meant another. A common cause of these errors are homophones. Two words that sound alike but have different meanings and spellings. Review the definition of the word you used and the word suggested.

P Patient. She has the patience of a saint. She has to to deal with me all day.
Repeated word. It would be better if you erase one of the repeated word. *Right* "to".

R Rebellious. Who said rare was a bad thing? This strong woman marches to the beat of her own drum. Frankly, its some of the best music I’ve ever heard, too. Or would that be read? Anyway, she has no desire to be a part of the "system." She prefers to create her own.
Try "it's or it is"

S Selective. Mara agonizes over every single word, every single aspect of her stories until it drives her mad. I wish she had more confidence in herself and her ability as a writer.
Typo. Try "organizes"

T Talented and trustworthy. One of my all-time favorite authors, on or offline, and one of the only people I will ever trust with my life.
Try "one of the few". Misheard phrase. Many typos come from writing phrases as we think we heard them, and not as they are.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I enjoyed reading this piece because you are playing with words here. So creative!. Write more!

*Shamrock* *Shamrock* *Shamrock*


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Review of Every Moment  
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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
Your explanation in this piece is very clear. I liked the subject but honestly, I'm not a fan of love poetry.

*Sheriff* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
The last stanza is my favorite:

My friend, my companion,
what I’m trying here to say,
is I love you every moment
of each and every day!

It shows a great love. *Smile*

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece but good news, I don't notice any signs of errors from the beginning to the end.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider the phrases 'each and 'everyday' in the second and last stanzas, because cliches are phrases used so much they lose their original power. Try revising the meaning of this phrase using your own words. It will make a stronger impact on your reader.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is very interesting because it describes a good heart with love. Write more!

*Shamrock* *Shamrock* *Shamrock*


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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
Few words tell a story. Good thought.

*Sheriff* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
All lines are my favorites because I liked the thought.

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece but good news, I don't notice any signs of errors from the beginning to the end.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I have no suggestions because nothing need an improvement there. It's done nicely.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I'm inspired in reading this piece because few words are played there. I recommend you to write more!

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*NoteR* OVERVIEW:
I'm a fan of haiku and that's why I want to review this inspiring piece for you. I'm very glad that I found it at your port because I'm going to learn your style of writing haiku poetry.*Smile*

*NoteR* FLOW:
I think this piece would flow much better if you put all of the lines together. The spaces between each lines broke into the flow of the poem when I read it. I know that haiku is very tricky sometimes and it allows a person to carefully choose a proper word that will fit with the content. I notice that your piece is good but it doesn't make sense in some ways. Below you'll see your piece as a sentence:

Silly cow with horns looking at me through the fence doesn't like people

I notice that an article, a verb, a linking word and a period were missing in the above sentence so I would write it this way *Down*

A silly cow with horns is looking at me through the fence and it doesn't like people. If I convert that to a 5/7/5 syllable format haiku. All goes wrong so it's better if you fix it and I think the best way is to change the words that won't fit there.

*NoteR* FAVORITE LINE(S):
The first line is my favorite because it sounds funny to me when you said the cow is silly. I know that all cows are naughty because they aren't human and they don't know what to do.

*NoteR* GRAMMAR/SPELLING:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece and I found that you have forgot to place the period at the end of the last line.

*NoteR* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I recommend you to consider my comments I wrote under 'Flow' and 'Grammar' HEADING.
I also suggest you to rewrite this piece because I know it'll be a good piece. I'd be happy to come back and review it and possibly raise the star rating if you make the necessary changes that I see.

*NoteR* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I did enjoy reading your poem but if you could spare some of your times in rewording it. I'm sure, your poem could be a must-read haiku poem. Write more!

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Review of A few Haiku  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
I'm a fan of haiku and that's why I want to review this inspiring piece for you. I notice that there are two haiku here.*Smile*

*Sheriff* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
The first, second and third lines of both haiku are my favorites.

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece but good news, I don't notice any signs of errors from the beginning to the end.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I don't have any idea in improving this piece because it's done nicely.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is wonderful and interesting and the count of syllables are perfect in this piece. Write more!

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Review of Dagger  
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*StockingR*OVERVIEW:
I had to read your piece many times to understand exactly what you were saying because the content wasn't clear but the subject is interesting and that makes me want to take time to read and review this piece. *Smile*

*StockingR*FLOW:
This piece is flow read well but it could be better if you correct the spelling of some words you used, so that it don't break the reading.

*StockingR*GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
Here are two words that you need to consider. 'Mourne' in line 6 and 'merryment' in line 10. I would change them to mourn/mourned and merriment. I suggest you to re-word the fourth stanza so that the reader could have a better understand in reading it.

*StockingR*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I recommend you to consider my comments I wrote under 'GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION' HEADING.

*StockingR*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I enjoyed reading your poem and I thank you for your time to write this wonderful piece. Write more!

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Review of A FLAMING FIRE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*StockingR*OVERVIEW:
I read this piece and I found that it is very interesting especially to the believer like me. I also can tell that you are a believer as well. I liked the subject. *Smile*

*StockingR*FLOW:
I like the flow of your poem because it flow reads very well. Nice job!

FAVORITE LINE(S):
The first, the second, third and fourth lines are favorite:
Fire of God ignite me;
I hide myself in You.
Spirit of God refine me,
and shine in all I do.

*StockingR*GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I searched for any errors but I couldn't find any in your piece. Good Job!

*StockingR*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to keep on sharing this piece with members of WDC.

*StockingR*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is wonderful and interesting. I congratulate you on this piece.

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Review of Essence of Life  
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*StockingR*OVERVIEW:
Your explanation about life is good and I liked the subject and also the metaphor you used.

*StockingR*FLOW:
I like the flow of your poem. It sounds good when I read it out loud.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
Line eleven, twelve and thirteen are my favorites:
Drawn out into eternity
And melt into
The essence of life itself.

*StockingR*GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I think you did great here but there's only one error that I could see in your piece and I will highlight it for under my suggustion.

*StockingR*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
In line 9 the word 'summers' should be summer's. You may consider it when you have time. *Smile*

*StockingR*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The expression here is very interesting and I enjoyed reading your piece. Write more!

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*StockingR*OVERVIEW:
Your thoughts in this piece are deep. I had to read it many times to understand exactly what you were saying.

*StockingR*FLOW:
When I read your poem out loud I found that it flows well. It was an enjoyable read. The syllables are very well counted as well.

FAVORITE LINE(S):
The first, second, third, fourth and the fifth lines are my favorites. *BigSmile*

*StockingR*GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I carefully searched for any errors in your piece but good news, I don't notice any signs of errors from the beginning to the end.

*StockingR*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I have no suggestions for you since your piece is good.

*StockingR*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is wonderful and interesting. I congratulate you on this piece. Write more!

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