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Review of My Irish Lass  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim*HAPPY ST. PATRICK'S DAY!

This is a perfect poem to read on this St. Patrick's Day weekend! What a very sweet poem it is. Any lady would be very flattered to have a poem like this written for her.

I love the lovely and poetic words you chose...'skin a hue of cream'! It's so beautiful!

I felt that the rhyme was really terrific and pleasant to read. The melodic flow was really nice.

I enjoyed the feeling of love which was expressed in your poem. ...A man dreams of a fantastic lady, and wakes to the reality that the lady of his dreams is his wife. That's a sweet thought. *Smile*

Hey, if you ever decide to explore fonts and colors, this might look very pretty in green, to match the emerald eyes in his dream. *Wink*

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Review of Don't Worry  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Happy St. Patrick's Day!

I really enjoyed reading your poem, which was written in both English and Irish. It's a very unusual find. *Smile*

The Irish words sound so pretty, and the translation seemed like advice worth taking.

It's certainly very thought provoking.

I would suggest to keep the English line closer to it's 'partner' Irish line, so that there's no doubt as to which line it is translating. Double spacing can be between the different lines. ...Or, why not write the poem first in Irish, and then followed by the English translation...

Is there a deep meaning to this poem? If there is, then maybe a short note of explanation at the end would be a great touch. I was a tiny bit confused as to how the ending, "That's it, that's correct", fit in with the rest...

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* HAPPY ST. PATRICK'S DAY!!

I found your limerick to be so very funny! *Laugh* LOL

I started reading it, not knowing where it was going, and then realized the punchline! That's so perfect for a limerick...To make a fun joke in a small space. You really succeeded in doing that. *Smile*

The flow of the limerick style was really smooth and pleasant to read.
...And I love the festive green.

So, that's what happens to beer that doesn't ferment!
I'll be thinking of your poem the next time I see O'Douls in the grocery store!
*Bigsmile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hello Power Unit! Thanks for joining in the fun of our
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for Lornda. She will love your poem, I'm sure. *Smile*

Your poem reminded me of the club from the Flintstones. Didn't they use pet names, like Grand Pooh-Bah? ...Or, maybe you were going for Lord-High-Everything-Else...Like from, 'The Mikado.'
Power has always encouraged a fun, friendly, and family atmosphere, and you expressed this same type of fun in your creative poem.

I love that acrostic style. You really had fun with the letters of LORNDA in your playful poem.

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Sunnystar! *Smile* Thanks for your participation in the mini challenge for Lornda. I'm sure you helped to put a big smile *Bigsmile* on her face.

I enjoyed the simplicity of your sweet poem.

The first letters of the acrostic style, were really easy to find with the red coloring.

The poetic wording you used was very complementary, thoughtful, and flattering.

Wow! That animated 'deadline' character at the top is so cute! Nice work! *Smile*

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Review of LORNDA  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Nice work, T. J.! Thanks for joining in the celebration of this mini challenge for Lornda. *Smile*

I particularly liked the structure of your poem. The story became simpler as it unfolded. It was almost like a countdown of memories, until we're here with today's celebration.

Your poem had a thoughtful and caring attitude in abundance!
It was very nice to say a 'thank you' and to add an anniversary wish for Lornda at the very end. Great work. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Sum1! Thanks for being one of the first to enter the mini challenge by writing a poem for Lornda! *Smile*

I'm sure Lornda will be very happy to read your poem. You said several really nice things about her.

I liked that you chose to use both of the acrostic prompts...'Lornda' and 'Memories'. That was creative and thoughtful.

It was a nice touch that you kept to the space theme that we all do for fun. You added both humor and flattery. The title was cute, too. Nice work. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is an informative poem about a river horse.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh my gosh, Harry, I'm going to look this horse up on my computer today! I never heard of it before. It's amazing to hear about horses in the wild. I've only ever seen them on ranches and at people's homes! *Bigsmile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Your poem had a gentle structure, while giving lots of interesting facts. I actually learned a lot from reading it, about this river horse.

I could picture a horse grazing in the grasses and wading in the water, from your nicely chosen words. He sounds really large, if he gets up to sixteen feet long...And, gosh, 8000 pounds! Thanks for sharing this information. *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I'd really love to see a picture of one. Did you ever consider adding an image along with this poem?

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Review of Another Birthday  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about an elderly person's birthday.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh my gosh! Do people live to be 120 years old? I guess there have been some recorded. Maybe with our modern medicines, and more medicines yet to come, more people will live to such ages very commonly in the future years. How does that saying go..."The longer you live, you longer you will live..." *Bigsmile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You chose the perfect genre for your poem. This is philosophical piece for sure. It really makes a person stop and think about what a person so old must be thinking and feeling. I think you expressed all of that well. I'm not sure I would have added the genre of comedy, though.

You're poem has a great look to it. It's centered nicely, and has just the right amount of poetic words to provoke thought and to get the points across.

I almost forgot that this was a 'free-verse' poem, because there seemed to be a smooth and well structured flow. ...Up until the end. The second line of the last stanza seemed to suddenly interrupt the consistentsy, which I felt you had going on.

I wasn't familiar with any of the medicines that you mentioned in one of your stanzas, but I also thought it's pretty irrelevant to actually need to know what they are. We don't really need that information in order to enjoy the poem. We could easily figure that part out from the rest of each of those lines.

In all, your poem told a great story. Nice work. *Smile*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your word search.

*Exclaim* LOL ROFL *Laugh* It said I 'cheated'!!
Sherri, this was the very first word search that I've ever done on WDC...I guess I never figured out that Java thing before. I worked on this for about 14 minutes, and then I just gave up. I didn't know it would say that I cheated because I clicked on 'solve'! That's so funny!

This is a great word search. It mentioned some of the wonderful WDC things which we all know and love...Rising Stars...Angel Army...I just wish these games would have a feature where it would also circle the items on the list as we find them. I was getting confused as to which ones I found already - I was tempted to put a dot next to them as they were done with an erasable marker! LOL *Laugh*

Thanks for making up this fun activity, Sherri. As I said, this was the first time for me, and I enjoyed it. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is one mom's poem, written to honor her sons.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: What a very sweet poem! I was so heartfelt! I also have two sons. My youngest just got married a few months ago. He gave me the task of finding a song for he and I to dance to at our wedding. After listening to so many youtube songs through teary eyes, I picked Coldplay's 'Yellow'. It was always a song that we both liked, and I knew if I picked one of the more touching songs, I would be crying on the dance floor. My baby boy was all grown up! I could feel this love in the poem you wrote for your own boys. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: You wrote this poem so well. I enjoyed the perfect rhyme. It made your touching poem even that much more pleasant to read. Each line was filled with your love and pride, too.

I really like that picture, which you included above the poem. Don't you just love when your boys 'dress up'! I have some of my family from a cruise ship right on my fire place mantle.

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote shop.

*Exclaim*These cNotes are perfect for this time of the year! I see that you created these cNotes back in 2008, but it's almost Valentine's Day once again! I hope everyone finds them because they are all great!

I'll have to remember them for next week. I especially like the one with the gold locket. It's a nice expression to show friends that they're being thought of during the 'chocolate' holiday! LOL *Laugh*

You have a big variety of cNotes in this collection. I think there's something for everyone. I noticed that Sonnet assisted you in putting this together. I haven't heard from her in a while. I wonder what happened to her....

Speaking of which...Your cNote in this collection that says, "Miss you", will be perfect to send to friends who I haven't heard from in a long while.

This is another collection which I'll add to 'my favorites'.

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Review of How can this be?  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a piece which gives thoughts to ponder...

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: ..And isn't that why we write...To find comfort from the tip of a pen! *Delight* Great job in putting this one together.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors in your philosophical piece.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: It's not too easy to find the meaning of this poem, but I guess that's why the genre is philosophy.

What I got out of it, is that life is whatever we make of it. You presented several thoughts and ideas. I liked the simplicity of this item. You gave just enough for our minds to fill in the rest.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I love the way this piece is centered. I think I would also double space the whole thing. It seems very squashed together and plain. Otherwise, very nice. *Smile*

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Review of Savage Waves  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Fire* Congrats! You're receiving a gift from "Invalid Item"  ! The Solar Package has been ordered for you from: THANKFUL SONALI Now What? and includes the review of five poems!! Enjoy! *Fire*

*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is written in the form of a Japanese style of poetry called, Tanka.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Oh I love this poem! I just looked up more information about tanks. I am very familiar with Haiku, which I enjoy very much, and this form is very similar. I'm glad I came across your, "Savage Waves!" *Smile*

How fitting that you wrote this poem for the Writer's Cramp! There is so much excitement about that activity this month! *Bigsmile*

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors here. This is a pleasure to enjoy.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Haiku poetry is so much fun, and now I see that Tanka is, too. *Bigsmile*

In, "Savage Waves", you told a whole story, while keeping to the perfect Tanka form.

Your poem sounds very graceful. I could feel the intense magnificence of the crashing waves. I was just in Hawaii a week ago. I tried to get a picture of the breaking waves, but they seemd to be too quick for me! I can really imagine the imagery of them in your poem! LOL

Maybe you might add a 'sea' photo along with this! *Wink*

I loved the touching way you ended the poem. It gave it an even more majestic feel. Impressive work! *Smile*

The note at the bottom about the Tanka form is a nice touch, too, for those who aren't familiar with this style.



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Review of Hands  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Fire* Congrats hopefullongshot ! You're receiving a gift from "Invalid Item"  ! The Fossil Fuel Package has been ordered for you from: Sophy and includes one review, story or poem, from any item in your port, plus two extra reviews!! Sophie sends along the message: "Congratulations! For entering the Cramp during our 10th Birthday Week, you have received a Fossil Fuel Review Package as one of our random giveaway prizes!"Enjoy! *Fire*

*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: A picture and some thoughtful words are 'sent' to a soldier by way of this touching poem.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! I could imagine being a soldier who received a picture of his child's hands, with such sweet words written on them! I don't think there would be a dry eye between him and his fellow soldiers! The child seemed very proud, but the dad could be just as proud to have such a brave youngster. *Smile*

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved the way the child wrote, "My hands I lay them open", toward the beginning and then echoed similar thoughts at the end. It's chilling to get into the mind of such a tiny person, and to feel the emotion they might feel through your very tender poem.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I didn't feel that the very first line read well. The first line gives the first impression of your poem, so it should probably be among the very best. You wrote, "These are a picture of my hands..." I think it might sound better written as, "This is a picture of my hands...", since it is referring to only one picture. Or you can change it to something like, "These are my hands...", because then it would be referring to more than one hand.

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is the first chapter of a fantasy story, dealing with magic, fairies, etc.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Thanks for posting your story on "Invalid Item" .

I felt that you wrote a pleasant and entertaining story! I particularly liked your character names. Maribelle is pretty, and I liked how your narrator called the one who enjoyed music, Melody.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Great job on putting this story together. I liked your introduction. The first and second paragraphs provided a great hook, which made me want to read more. The story of how the narrator met his new friends was really intriguing.

The events that the narrator told about were really interesting, especially the one about the tiny demonic fairies. You displayed your creative ideas well.

"Our hearts pounded like my school's marching band's percussion section..." Your descriptions added to the excitement of the adventures well. Nice work there. *Smile*



*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: I would suggest going back through your story and changing some of the tenses. Decide which tense you want and stick with it. For example, in your first paragraph, You wrote, "Melody breaks down..." and "...closed their eyes." That's two different tenses. Later in the story you wrote, "Life was fine...we all enjoy our time together." ...And, "... I went to sleep, and then I dream." Your tenses have been consistently different throughout the entire story. Now that you have the draft written, the tenses should be easy to change. *Smile*

I was wondering why Rhogar's name wasn't mentioned in the first introductory paragraph, since he's one of the main characters. You named several characters, but of them all, this should be one that would be listed.

In one part of your story, you wrote, "...chasing us and on our tails, literally in Melody's case." I really didn't get this. I thought Rhogar would have a tail because he was half dragon, not Melody.

In the paragraph about the nose bleed, you wrote, "...natural for her ask me..." Typo...I'm sure you meant to write, "natural for her to ask me.."

This sentence doesn't read well: "I can will, but it might take a little while..." Is this implying that the narrator's name is, Will, or is this just a typo?

I felt that the dream part of the story was very rushed. You have really great descriptions. I would break those three large paragraphs up into a few more, to add more drama and adventure to that dream episode. To make it seem less 'out of place', perhaps you might consider making a paragraph in between which goes back to 'real time' to keep your readers in the room during the narrator's dream. I did like the ending, which eluded to the fact that your readers will find out what that was all about when they read chapter two. Keep it going! *Smile*

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Review of Undead Comedy  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello spidey !

Oh my gosh! Who dared to give you so many stars for this bad poem? Off with their heads!! *Shock*

This part was delicious:
LOL I love the thoughts of zombies pretending that crunching popcorn is brains! ...And the crunching sound masks the screaming noise!! *Bigsmile*

I'd *Ax* this part:
I won't be chopping into this one. *Ax* ax

Overall:
Ah, the perfect poem to read on a Saturday - Zombies movie night. I wonder what will be playing...Oh I know!! ...Night of the Living Dead!! *Bigsmile*

~~Maryann

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story written for Power's writing mini challenge about names.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! What an awesome story! I was really impressed! You're name is very meaningful. It shows how special names are to your family. You must feel very proud. Thanks for sharing. *Smile*

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in this story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I always thought of cicada's as being very exotic and mysterious. I can see why they were admired by your grandmother. *Smile*

It's interesting how you became the 'last'. That was destiny at it's best! *Delight*

Great job in keeping this story entertaining, and it was a nice touch to highlight that cicada word...Just to be sure everyone knows what it is.

The presentation of this work is outstanding. I like how you included an image, and made the font of the story in the same color. *Smile*

...And the title of your story is just right! *Wink*

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Review of A Girl of 5 faces  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a writing entry in Power's mini challenge.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Wow! I really enjoyed reading your name story. It reminded me of fun times that I experienced with my family and all their nicknames. I understand how sometimes one might not even recall how a nickname came about. My nephew had the nickname, Bug, for the longest time. Of course, now that he's a popular teen, he never goes by that anymore! LOL

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors in this story.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I liked following along with the story of all your nicknames. I especially liked how one stuck during Soccer. It always seems to bond the group a bit more when they have special names for each other.

I liked the last one you ended up with the best, and I'm glad you use it on WDC. Thanks for sharing your great story. *Smile*

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Review of How I Became Sum1  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: ...A writing challenge entry written for Power's mini challenge.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: I love your humor! Yes, you are sum1 special indeed. You are a great Power captain - 'You review, improve your skills, and love to help others.'

*Check2*ERRORS: No errors in this well written piece.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: LOL I like how 2005 can seem like ice ages ago! I know that feeling! *Laugh*

Good for you to keep your persona and work with it. Sum1swriting is a perfect username, and sum1 is fantastic as well. You really made me smile when I read all those other 'family' names...Like Evry1 and No1. Thanks for sharing the fun! *Smile*

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*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This item is an entry for Power's mini writing challenge.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS:Wow! Is this a career that you do research for or is this volunteer work? Either way, I applaud you for all the good you do. This is caring at it's best.

*Check2*ERRORS: I didn't see any errors here.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: Yuck! Your vivid descriptions...Like the worm that grows three feet inside the body...seem mind-boggling! I'm a 'bottled water' gal. I don't even drink our 'non-itchy' water. I admire your thoughtful handle. Let's hope a solution is someday found. *Smile*

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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello Cobwebby Space Reader Reindeer !

Wow! You must have eaten lots of brains to think up this one! VERY impressive! I loved all of those movies...Well, some of them scared me to pieces! *Shock*
The use of them in quatrains is amzing! *Thumbsup*

This part was delicious:
This very modern zombie speaks of Craniums rather than brains! So cool! *Cool*

I'd *Ax* this part:
Nothing to chop here. *drags *Ax* away...*

Overall:
Hmmm, I think it's time for this zombie to see, "I am Legend" once again! *Bigsmile*


~~Maryann

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Review of wasted beauty  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with Poetry Zombie Horde  
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello spidey !

Yay! Sounds like a disco song..."Do the shuffle..." Zombies love to dance! *Delight*

This part was delicious:
Oooh! What a yummy thought!! ..."Crunching brains oozing from the zombie mouths!" That added yet another great color to the earthy tones of the Autumn season. *Bigsmile*

I'd *Ax* this part:
I'll just be dragging my *Ax* away from these woods...

Overall:
Ah, a true mix of nature and zombies in the Autumn...I'll be listening for that shuffling from now on! *Shock*


~~Maryann

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Review of Zombie Tim's Bio  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with Poetry Zombie Horde  
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
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Hello Cobwebby Space Reader Reindeer !

Oh, and you even included a link to this fine movie. Well, you made it sound so good, but I might just pass. I actually enjoyed your zombie version better. We'll have to talk with Hollywood. *Smirk*

This part was delicious:
Yes, the thought of teens drinking something and then turning green at the fast food place was good food for zombie thought. *Sick*

I'd *Ax* this part:
I love this movie already! I wouldn't *Ax* any of it. I might even start a Zombie Tim fan club. *Bigsmile*

Overall:
This was the zombie American Dream for sure. It was so great to give it a happy ending.

~~Maryann

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Review of Name Challenge  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Thumbsup*Reviewed by Maryann *Thumbsup*


*Note4* FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story about one member's user name and how she came to get it.

*Exclaim* THOUGHTS: Bravo! I loved your inspirational story. It promotes the thought that we can't love others until we first learn to be happy with ourselves. Thanks for taking the time to enter "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 's writing mini challenge.

*Star*FAVORITE PART: I loved the whole thing. Gaer Tuilinn means Copper Colored Sparrow!! That's so pretty!! I think it's hard to find many people who don't like 'Elvish'! *Bigsmile*

Many have been in that dorm room environment. How scary and exciting it must all seem for the first time. Many questions would go through their minds about what's to come. You took your reader's through all those thoughts, ideas, and stages in just a small story.

The narrator understands that her story is constantly continuing, yet she shows such growth by the last paragraph. Your touch of humor about holding the crochet needle made me smile. Very nice work. *Smile*

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS: Uh oh, there's a very tiny typo in your first sentence. "On quiet and stormy night..." should probably mean...One quiet...Or, On a quiet...

'Just one idea you might use or not...I would move the last sentence over to your humorous afterthought about learning to crochet. ...And put all of that inside of so that it looks like this:

The Lesson:
This is who I am. I know the road ahead will not always be easy, but it is exciting to be on this journey still learning new lessons every day.

Also: I was able to learn how to crochet.

*Balloon2**Balloon3*-Write on!*Balloon4**Balloon5*


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