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#3550698

Review of SHORT STORIES

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Rated: E

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FIRST IMPRESSION: Find great stories in this folder.

THOUGHTS: Wow, Liam! Your portfolio grew in an amazing way since I last stopped by to read The Dead Letter! Way to go. You're portfolio improved so much, and it looks great! I'm so glad to know you as a Power member.

ERRORS: No errors. You did this well.

FAVORITE PART: This is great! A person visiting your port will find a bunch of great stories here. Your port came a long way. I'm looking forward to seeing your port grow over the years.

SUGGESTIONS: You have great stories in your folder, and your portfolio has a neat and organized look. I like how you did write something to introduce this folder, but maybe you might also think about writing a few short lines more. ..Some intriguing thoughts about a story or two..Just a couple of lines so not to give any spoilers. You can also think about adding one of your images...Just a thought.

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Review of A Guide

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Rated: 13+

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FIRST IMPRESSION: Poem about how a cat friend gives a young girl hope.

THOUGHTS: Hi Ally. Welcome to WDC and a big thank you for joining our Power group. Great to have you.

ERRORS: No errors. Nice work.

FAVORITE PART: What a sweet and well-written poem! I have a surprise coming to you for this one...An awardicon!

Your poem gave me shivers and brought tears to my eyes. Reen reminded me of my Penelope...

The girl names her friend, and seeks him out...Needs him. The cat gives the girl hope, love, and friendship. Very touching! Keep writing and reviewing! You're doing a great job with adding these items so easily to your port. Very impressive.

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Review of A Poem A Day Contest

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Rated: E

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a contest just for poems.

THOUGHTS: Oh what a great idea for a contest! Lots of WDC members love to write poems, so this will be a great place to show what they can do in a community setting.

ERRORS: I didn't find any errors in this perfectly done heading. Nice work.

FAVORITE PART: I thought the rules were very clear and easy to follow. From the look at the way your entries are pouring in, it seems many people feel that way.

I like the way this is set up. It's easy to read and easy to find information, such as judging, rules, and donation information. You set this up well, and I was able to leave a donation right from a post.

The image is great, too. Good luck with your contest. I hope it's lots of fun for you and those who enter.

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Review of WDC Power Challenge Bird Story

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This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

What a very charming bird story! I loved the dialog, right from the first line where her 'behind' was freezing! So funny!

I'm so glad you joined in on "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 's in group mini challenge. You really showed team spirit, and this line made that point well: "Hey Homer! We are surveying the land so we can do reviews of what we saw. We rock! We are powerful! We are going to be famous writers and critics someday!"

You did a great job in bringing personality to the three little birds of Breaker's image. Nice work!

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Review of Reticent Anguish

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This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

This poem is really beautiful.

I can feel the strong emotion and the feeling of hope that comes along with the struggle.

The choice of words you used, such as "dolor upon my soul", was very creative in adding to the intensity of the touching poem.

I would add a genre of 'inspirational', because this poem makes one look ahead to the brightness of a new day.

By the way, the very ending is all which didn't flow right to me...The title talks that 'there will dawn a new day', however your poem ends with, 'a new eve'. I think I would have expected 'a new dawn'.

Keep writing these great poems. I really enjoyed stopping by your port.

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Review of Two Lives

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Rated: E

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This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

I love the style of your poem. It read like a limerick. I felt that it had a gentle playfulness in that way.

The rhyme is really smooth, and enjoyable.

This piece can hold truth for many Writing.com members. We have our 'in-person' lives...Some of us are students...Others have busy jobs...Kids...But we all meet here on this friendly on-line community. It's like having two lives, as you said!

Yes, it strikes thought. We're the same person, yet how different it is to be in two different worlds. ...And we've all experienced the joy and the consequences! What would we ever do without the internet!

Thanks for sharing your poem, and welcome to WDC.

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Review of Limerick For Star Trek Poem Contest

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Rated: E

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I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Star Trek Poetry CONTEST " . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

LOL Okay Debbie, you caught me off guard and you have me cracking up laughing, so that my dogs think I'm nuts once again!! That doesn't happen all that often, but thanks for writing something so fun to read, that it made me laugh.

How many times did we all watch a Star Trek episode and just knew which 'extra' was going to die by the color of their shirt, and their unknown look. Wouldn't it have been AWESOME for one of them to beat the odds by dyeing their shirt a different color! LOL Great fun and ideas in your fantastic limerick.

I really love limericks, btw, when they rhyme so smoothly and are very well done. Your limerick was just such an experience. It was playful, friendly, and read like a pleasant song. Thanks for entering the Star Trek contest.

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Review of On This Day (A Wedding Poem)

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is the perfect poem about love and marriage.

THOUGHTS: What a beautiful poem! My son just recently got married, so that's why I noticed your wedding poem. Yours was filled with sentiments and romance!

ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

FAVORITE PART: I felt your poem was very touching and sweet. I can feel the strong bond of marriage right from the very first stanza - which was my absolutely favorite part of the poem! What a sweet declaration of love! Their dreams came true. These can be marriage vows!

I really didn't find anything in this poem which needed improvement. The rhyme seemed smooth to me, which added to the pleasant reading experience. The tender wording set the enjoyable mood. ...And the theme of love was consistent. I liked how your poem is centered nicely, too.

Ending it with an 'I Do' is the perfect ending to this nicely done poem.

SUGGESTIONS: This is the perfect season to put your wedding poem in places...There are lots of summer weddings. You might want to look around for things like contests where you can enter this poem.

I happen to know that you're really good at creating images. Why not add an image of a wedding cake below your poem?

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#3531605

Review of A Message from Your Reviewer

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Rated: 13+

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is an informative item about reviewing.

THOUGHTS: Great job in putting this one together, Dreams. You really covered all of the points in a clear way. I can see how this one will be a big help to anyone who reads it.

ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

FAVORITE PART: Not only did you tell what you look for while you're reviewing, but you actually gave helpful tips about what a person can do to improve their items.

I liked how you broke your information up into clear and easy-to-follow bullets. You covered it all -- punctuation, grammar, dull vs exciting, etc. -- it's all here.

You humbly mentioned that, in other words, that you practice what you preach by looking into these details in your own work.

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#3519648

Review of The Dead Letter

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Rated: E

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a short story about the delivery of a unique letter.

THOUGHTS:What a beautiful and touching story! It held my attention from the beginning to the end, and I absolutely loved the punch line at the end.

FAVORITE PART: We felt the frustration the driver was feeling. He had to drive so far just to deliver one letter, which was so long over due to be delivered. You gave that much of his personality in just a small space.

You wrote a fine character in for the kind old lady. The surprise at the end was very sweet.

SUGGESTIONS: Now that the writing assignment is over (Or, when it is over...), you might want to include the information that this was a writing assignment and what was involved, as a small note at the beginning of your story. This way, you might choose a more catching title instead of 'Class Assignment'.

You only picked one genre. I would go back to edit this item, and pick the two more that you are allowed. This way, your item and port might receive more views. You might, for example, add the genre, 'adventure', or 'family'.

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Review of My Mother

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a limerick about a mother.

THOUGHTS: I love this limerick! I think you're the only member who posted a limerick on the list, and I'm so glad you did.

ERRORS: I didn't find any errors here.

FAVORITE PART: I had lots of fun reading your limerick. Limericks always seem to have a fun and happy flow to them, and your was no exception. The middle of the limerick, that says she would never miss a chance at a kiss is the best!

This is a great way to honor your mom. Great job.

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Review of The death of captain Kirk

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Rated: 13+

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I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Star Trek Poetry CONTEST " . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

What a sentimental ending - This was something that even McCoy couldn't fix.

You only just touched on the tale in your short and simple poem, but you succeeded in adding lots of great Star Trek lingo.

Thanks for making our contest be the first contest you entered on WDC. I hope you'll enter again next month.

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#3517840

Review of A Trilling Adventure

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Rated: E

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I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Star Trek Poetry CONTEST " . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

Thanks for putting a grin on my face. Your humorous story poem was funny from the beginning to the end.

"Think of a singing ball of bright fur..." What a great opening line for your tribble poem!

The smooth-flowing rhyme made your poem even more pleasant to read.

It was fun to remember that episode again. Also, the note at the bottom about it was a great idea. The link to the contest was a good addition, too.

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Review of Picture story

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Rated: E

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about how words can form a picture in the mind.

THOUGHTS: I can picture what you're saying. ...I just had to say that! These are thoughts that we all need to keep in mind while we write. We've all been taught to show, not tell, and you did a good job of putting these ideas into a poem.

ERRORS: I didn't find any errors.

FAVORITE PART: This was a great idea for a poem. You succeeded in creating an educational story-poem, that was a pleasure to read. It's nice to learn things in a fun way. Your philosophical and poetic words will do that.

You wrote that entertaining stories are the ones told from the heart, and it seems that you wrote this one from the heart.

The smooth rhyme added to the pleasant flow of the poem, and the blue font and centering was a nice compliment to it.

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Review of This Title Makes No Claim

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Rated: 13+

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poem about the temporary nature of man.

THOUGHTS: Wow, this is certainly very beautiful poetry. This is the type of poem that makes your readers think deeply about your philosophical ideas.

ERRORS: I didn't notice any errors in this well-written piece.

FAVORITE PART: I enjoyed reading your poem. It goes far beyond a simple rhyming poem. Your poem showed incredible thought an talent. I enjoyed the 'cattle king' stanza the best of all!

It goes to prove that some things which people seem to think are important, are only small in the scheme of things, and don't last forever.

I really loved your very last stanza. It was tender and sweet.

SUGGESTIONS: In your brief introduction, you wrote, "Thich Nhat Hanh said, is, is is." Maybe some people know at once what that means, but you might like to write a sentence or two about it before or after your poem to show the relation. You might include something about what thoughts you were attempting to show in this work. A note about your Rwanda stanza might also be nice, for those who aren't history buffs...

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#3507411

Review of Seasons Reasons

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Rated: E

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a poll about the four seasons.

THOUGHTS: This is a great idea for a poll. I often wonder which seasons people enjoy more. Some say summer is too hot, yet everyone always looks forward to it. Some miss the snow when they can't be in those areas in the winter. Many are eager for spring, and also love the colors of fall...

ERRORS: I didn't see any errors.

FAVORITE PART: You seem to have set the poll up well. I like your choices, though I might have probably put, "I like them all", in the place of "I don't care", but that of course is your choice. Anyway, nice job in thinking up this poll.

SUGGESTIONS: Like I mentioned before, there are many good points about each season. You have a nice poll, but there's not much to it. Why not add a sentence or two about each of the seasons in your heading...

You might also write a bit about why you are interested in this poll...What your favorite season is...

You wrote in your brief introduction that you'd like to know all about what the people are picking. Why not write that in your heading as well. You might ask them to leave you a review or send you an email to let you know why they picked a certain season.

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#3506381

Review of Nature's Playground

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a really cute story about children at play while enjoying nature.

THOUGHTS: This is a perfect nature story. You wrote it so well, that I can actually envision being there.

ERRORS: This is perfect. I didn't find any errors. Nice work with proofreading.

FAVORITE PART: Wow! Your descriptions are spot on. You succeeded in awaking every one of the senses. You readers will imagine the feel of bumping down a rocky hill on a cardboard sled, and the sights of autumn. They'll almost hear the squish of mud between toes.

I liked the fun and adventurous theme of your cute story. Nice work.

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Review of Do You know Your Dragons?

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Rated: E

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a fun quiz about famous dragons.

THOUGHTS: Ah this was lots of fun! I scored 12 out of 18. A couple of them I really took guesses.

When you have this one up and going, I would like to add a link to it in the heading of "Movie Talk"

, if that's okay with you. I think lots of people who enjoy movies would love to take this quiz.

ERRORS: I didn't see any errors.

FAVORITE PART: You named some of my very favorite movies and books. Of course I loved all of the Harry Potter series. Who could forget Sean Connery in Dragonheart... Spirited Away was one of my all time favorite animations.

I liked your heading, too, before the quiz. The humor in the opening quote was great!

SUGGESTIONS: Will I get to know how I scored against others? I know I'll have some tough competition against the fantasy group...

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Review of The Blind Date

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Rated: ASR

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is an odd story about a blind date.

THOUGHTS: Oh my gosh! I won't give away the ending in this public review in case anyone happens to glance at this, but I didn't see that coming at all! That was so funny!

FAVORITE PART: I did enjoy this very much. I found it entertaining and pleasant to read.

I was curious as to what would become of the blind date and I wondered who these people were. Gosh, you showed your creativity by creating such a surprise ending. Nice work.

SUGGESTIONS: I found myself losing track at times as to who was saying what. I'm not sure what the activity asked for of this item, but maybe you might add in their names in more places, etc.

A link to the activity you wrote this item for might also be helpful in getting your readers to understand why it's written the way it is...Or a note at the bottom can give a bit of explanation.

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#3486891

Review of The Cat (2nd. Twisted Tales Contest)

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Rated: 13+

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story about a cat and the supernatural.

THOUGHTS: Wow! Your eerie story made me shiver! I didn't even realize how captivated I was in reading it, until I had goosebumps!

ERRORS: I didn't see any errors. This is well written. It's no wonder this story already had 14 reviewers.

FAVORITE PART: I felt that your mesmerizing story was written like a master story-teller from beginning to end. This would be a great story at Halloween time.

I liked how you casually added details, which added to the eeriness of it. For example, the cat was found on Friday the 13th. Right away from the beginning, you set the mood for the rest of the story. It causes your readers to wonder what happens next.

It was a touching moment to read about the condition Meeka was in when Lenore found her. Your readers can understand that Lenore has a good heart to take the cat in and take care of her so well.

LOL I liked the humor when Rudolph wished the cat came with a mute button! Words like, 'yowling', make your readers imagine the cats voice.

I also laughed to myself when I read how it's told that some cats can train their humans! I can relate to that, as my Labrador certainly has me trained. She'll stand in a certain spot in the kitchen, and then I know to go to the dog biscuit jar...

Lenore thought Meeka had ties to the world of the supernatural. Gosh! What an ending! Rudolph became a believer at the end, didn't he! Great job in putting this story together.

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Review of Decembers End

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Rated: 18+

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I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "a very Wodehouse challenge" . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

It is said that time heals all wounds, and as you wrote in your poem, "...time will change and age may mend." Great wisdom there...

I enjoyed the mention of "lips of frost", as I felt it reflected the coldness of the December title.

I also enjoyed the gentle rhyme of your poem, and I liked the play on words, such as the cupid's dart. I thought that perhaps the c in Cupid should be capitalized. ...Anyway, those types of words added a bit of magical fantasy to your tender and bittersweet poetic words.

The image was a nice touch, too. Great work!

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Review of Shattered Souls...

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Rated: E

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I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "a very Wodehouse challenge" . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

You put together a well written poem. I felt that these lines could be un-marriage vows!

It seemed to me that the rhyme flowed smoothly, which made your poem pleasant to read. I also enjoyed reading some of the more whimsical words you chose, such as "Twould be to be unbound", and "crimson smiles."

The use of italicized lines for thoughts showed creativity. Nice work.

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Review of Moonstruck

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Rated: E

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FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a very pretty poem about the night sky.

THOUGHTS: Let me be among the first to welcome you to WDC. I'm impressed to see so many wonderful items in your port already.

FAVORITE PART: I enjoy reading poems about the night sky. Your poem made me think about the many twinkling lights of the stars, and the soft glow of the night.

I liked the poetic words of your second stanza the best. Ironically, the first line of your poem was the only line which didn't read well to me...And that's also what you have in your brief introduction. It didn't at all take away from the beauty of your lovely poem. Very nice indeed...

SUGGESTIONS: You didn't yet pick a genre for you poem. Right now, it is listed under 'other'. You might go back and edit and choose something...Romance...Fantasy...etc. This way, your poem will get more views when someone does a search.

Later, you might showcase your poem a bit more. It's a very pretty poem, so it would be well deserved to have a nice 'first' appearance. Perhaps think about centering your poem. Maybe experiment with the size or color of the font. At some point, you might go back and add a wondrous image...

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Review of The Doctor Was Here

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Rated: ASR

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I AM REVIEWING YOUR STORY AS A JUDGE FOR "Star Trek Poetry CONTEST " . THANKS FOR ENTERING!

This review is an acknowledgment of your contest entry, as well as some of my brief thoughts.

I enjoyed the touch of humor in your poem, especially the line, "Something old...Something new...Something blue..." LOL I wouldn't want that standing in my way! ...But then, Nero was trying to destroy the Earth! He got what he deserved. That was a good lesson to the enemies of the Doctor.

Nice conflict between the Doctor and Nero. Also, great to mention the black hole, Kirk, and the Federation along with all things 'Trek' related.

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