Very good story, very well written. I like that you used a mirror to show the angel, as a reflection of yourself, but not yourself. Keep up the great writing!
I really like this article, and what it said. It is so true that the people you meet do bring a gift, maybe one that you don't even realize at that time. Keep up the good writing, and thanks for your gift to me!
Very good writing. I love the prospective in which you wrote the story, with eve telling the story. Beautiful descriptive writing. It is a biblical story that is a lot easier to read, then the original. Keep up the excellent writing.
The story you wrote was good. It contained a lot of grammar errors, misspelled words, missing apostrophes. A spell check would catch most of these for you. However your story is interesting, and with feeling. We all get caught up more in telling the story than paying attention to the details. Keep up the writing because that stuff is an easy fix. Good luck, happy writing : )
You are a very talented writer, and I really enjoyed your style. You captured what all of us have done. Thinking your writing is so good til you reread the crap. Very good kept up the writing wil be looking forward to more.
A very hard to write story. Done well. I feel the pain in your mind, forgive yourself there was a reason you did it. I'm sure you will know that soul again.
I really liked your story. I liked the way you use the forest. Older cultures believed in the spirits of the forests. I believe that God is in every living thing. The forest understood your life, and cried when you were sad (rain dripping from the leaves). The roots that you tripped over may have had to do with the struggle you felt inside. Whether to keep the child, and if you were prepared to handle the child and your life by yourself. I feel the forest made the hard choice for you. However it cried for you loss. I love the forest too. These are just the thoughts your story brought out of me. I'm sorry too. Heartfelt tears.
Your pain comes through very much so, and I can feel the heartache that you endure.So with that being said you do a good job relating your feelings. Most relationships fail because of over expectation of another. They don't change or become what you want them to be. This works in both directions. Love not the lie, expectation is. I hope you find all the happiness in the world.
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