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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a very informative lesso in free verse poetry. However, I still do not feel comfortable in writing this type of poetry. I did not see any typoes or other mistakes. What I liked were the examples of free verse and blank verse. The question that I have is: Wouldn't writing a free verse poem be close to writing a story?
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Review of The Usher Of Life  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a great poem. It reminded me of my granfather. His passion was working with his hands and wood. He also loved fishing. I did not see any typoes or other mistakes. What I liked about the poem was the way you described the way he gave life to the things around him. There was not anything I disliked avout the poem. My overall impression of the poem is that it is very heartfelt and enduring to everyone who reads it. Great Job!
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Review of My Bio  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a very informative and interesting bio. I have a bio in my port, of you would like to read it. I did not see any typos or other mistakes. What I liked about your story was how you made it sound like you lived in a carefree area. There was not anything I disliked about the story. My overall impression of the story was that it took me back to the days of penny candy and soda pop and being able to live in a world where your only worry was whether you brought home a bad grade or not. Great Writing!
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Review of Ben And Rosie  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a beautiful story. I did not see any typos or other mistakes. What I liked about the story was how Ben's situation was described and the relationship between Rosie and Ben. It makes me wish I had siblings like Rosie. There was not anything I disliked about the story. My overall impression of the story is that it is very moving and the lesson it teaches is one of compassion and understanding. You have done a superb job with this Bill. Write ON!
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I am not sure if this was meant to be a short story, or a more complicated one. There was one typo that I saw. In the first paragraph, you use the word loosed. Should it be released? This is a good story, however, it could have more detail. You say in your descrption that there is an effect on the rest of the family after the death. That was not really explained. How did the parents deal with the death? What about Melanie? It seems as if she is lost in the shuffle of life. It is almost as if her parents don't realize this affected her also. That needs to be drawn out and explained. You have a great story here. Write ON!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem is telling a story. However, it needs some work. I hope you don't mind if I tell you what is needed to improve the poem:

Im standing on a corner holding,
my mother hand worried about,
were we are going to sleep tonight.

Should read:

I am standing on a corner
holding my mother's hand worried,
Where are we going to sleep tonight?

We have no family were all alone and,
my fathers a deadbeat who probably
forgot that I was even born.

Should read:
We have no family; We are all alone.
My father's a deadbeat who
Forgot I was even born

My mother lost her job then our home.
now we are sleeping in a shelter,
leaving before the morning sun.

Should be:
My mother lost her job, then our home
Now we are sleeping in a shelter,
leaving before the morning sun

While other kids go to school to learn,
I go to school for the free lunch served.
This is fine

Teacher’s wonder why I'm so stressed out,
You would be to if you might have to sleep
on the street tonight.
Should be:

Teachers wonder about my stress
You would be also
If you might have to sleep
On the street tonight.

My mother is trying the best she can,
to find a job and a place to stay
but, the doors keep getting slammed
in her face
Should be:

My mother is trying her best
To find a job, a place to stay.
But doors keep getting slammed in her face.

Things may seem hopeless and unfair but the
one thing that keeps her spirit's high, is
that she still me and that’s
something money cannot buy.
Should be:

Things may seem hopeless and unfair.
One thing that keeps her spirits high
is that she still loves me
That is something money cannot buy.

I liked the theme of the poem. It shows homelessness from a child's point of view. My overall impression of the poem is that it shows what it is like to be homeless. I hope you do not take offense that I took your poem stanza by stanza and tried the make it better. These are only my suggestions. Welcome to the site and I will look more at your port.

Write On!
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Review of Why Do I Write?  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This monologue tells me that you like to write in the fantasy/horror genre. Unfortunately, I don't particularly like that. I never did. I did see one typo-sooth shouod be soothe. What I liked about this was that you told the reader what you are about and what some of your interests are. There was not anything that I disliked about the piece. My overall impression of the piece is that it is well thought out and it shows me, the reader, the type of person you are. I would like to get to know more. Write On!
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Review of Wiccan Queen  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like poems more, as you can tell by my poetry folder. Although this is also of the horro/scary genre, I still liked this. Like the previous story I just read, this also has the reader spellbound. Its flow was natural and it carried my interest to the end. I did not see any typoes or other mistakes. My overall impression of the poem is that it is well written and thought provoking. Great Job!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Although I usually do not read horror/scary, this was spell binding. I liked it. I did not see any typoes or other mistakes. What I liked about the story weas that it kept the reader on the edge of their seat at every turn. There was not anything that I disliked about the story. My overall impression of the story is that it is well written and the story flows well. Great Job Write On!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This was a very informative letter, giving many pertinant tips for members. I did not see any typoes or other mistakes. What I liked about the letter was its layout and the explanation of each tip. There was not anything that I disliked about the letter. My overall impression of the letter was that it gave the reader/writer important ways to gain more exposure to their own ports so that they would be able to be known here. Please visit my port. I have some new items in my Poetry folder and I want people to review that folder so that I could possibly tuun it into a book.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
These are excellent explanations and examples of poetry. I'll have to study them more closely. I didn't see any typoes or other mistakes. What I liked about the piece was how you explained the various forms of poetry and gave concrete examples. There wasn't anything I disliked. My overall impression of the piece is that it is very informative and thought provoking. Write On!
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Review of Trixy the Pixie  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed this tory immensely. I did not see any typos or other mistakes. What I liked about the story was that it had great imagry and flowed easily. There was not anything I disliked about the story. My overall impression of the story is that it would be a great story for children from about age three to eight. This is a great item. Did it win Writer's Cramp?
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Review of The Jacket  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I really like this story. I did not see any typos or other mistakes. What I liked about the story is that it flows very easily. There was not anything I disliked about the story. My overall impression of the story is that it is very suspenseful and holds the reader's attention and interest. It is very well written. It made me totally empathize with Sam and at the same time totally dislike Hilary. She sounds like a real pain.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a good poll question Robin. I am glad you asked it. Jessie was correct in askin got have more men bec ome members of this group. It would be nice to see what men think. Maybe it help us women in trying to figurw out the other gender. More men should keep a journal, even if it is for their own personal viewing. At least that would give them an outlet to release their feelings and not explode.
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Review of Rate Yourself!  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is an interesting poll. I know I'm not that good, mediocre at best. What I liked about the poll question was how you asked the poller to be honest. I guess most were. If not, you would end up with one hundred percent perfectionists. There wasn't anything i disliked about the poll. There were no typos or other mistakes. My overall impression of the poll is that it is something for people to think about. Great job!
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Review of I Saw You Today  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I really liked this piece. I am glad that you were able to rid yourself of all of your demons. Drugs and alcohol are nobody's friends. While I was reading this, I imagined what it would have been like if I ran into my ex-husband at the store. I would freak out. I did not see any typos or any other mistakes. I liked the piece because it really said how you felt about this person. Did he see you, or did he just walk away?
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Review of Dear Baby  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Reading this letter tore my heart out. I have a three year old son and he is my miracle. I was told by a doctor to have an abortion, but I chose not to. I'm glad I made tht choice. Do you have any children now? I did not see any typos or other mistakes. What I liked about the letter was tht it was heart felt and sincere. My overall impression of the letter was that it was true, to the point, and genuine. Write On!
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Review of Barely Breathing  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a beautiful poem. I'm glad that everything turned out well for you and your family. It is really great when you see children who were thought not to have a chance, blossom and, in fact, beat the odds. Your two boys will probably bring you lots of joy and happiness in the future. Time goes by too quickly.
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Review of The Empty Cradle  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem is very moving and thought provoking. I'm very sorry that your little girl wasn't able to live long. There weren't any typos that I could see. What I liked about the poem is the way it flowed and described what you and your daughter went through. There wasn't anything that I disliked about the poem. My overall impression of the poem is that it is heart wrenching, sincere, and inspiring. Great Job!
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Review of Letting Go  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very heart felt letter to someone who should have known better. Are the two of you divorced, or just seperated? The only typo I saw was cognizance. I'll have to look that word up in the dictionary. What I liked about this was how you told him how you feel. What I didn't like was how you seem to blame yoourself for HIS waywardness. It's HIs fault that he didn't keep his marrige vows, not yours. My overall impression about the letter is that it's well written but you need to spread the blame evenly. Write on!
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Review of All That Matters  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can see why your teacher became teary eyed. I also have. When a special person comes into our lives and touches our heart without our knowledge, they leave a permanent print of love. I liked how this story spoke of your experiences with Mabel. Some people are lonely, but don't wnat to admit it. Obviously, you brought her comfort and joy in her life of pain and weakness. Great job!
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Review of Fingers  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Unratable.)
This gives a visual impression of a writer at the computer. I didn't see any errors or typos. What I liked about the poem was that it painted a picture for the reader. There wasn't anything that I didn't like about the poem. Nice job! Write On!
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Review of Lexi's Groups  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It looks like you have some helpful groups here. I just looked at the list, but didn't open any of the folders. There were no errors. What I liked was the variety of groups that you have. I did not see anything that I did not like. My overall impression of the groups fold is one where it is well organized, descriptive, and informative. Great Job!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I have to say a few things about this piece. 1} It does sound like a teacher wrote this. I realize that you were one for many years, and that makes it informative. As I was reading this the voice of my 7th grade English teacher, Mrs. Goodwin, was ringing in my head. 2} This reminds me of all the comments I used to receive on many papers when I was in elementary school.

I didn't find any spelling, grammatical, or punctuation errors. What I liked about the piece was that it's very informative and allows a writer to know what a reviewer is looking for. What I didn't like was the way this was laid out. It may turn people off and remind them too much of their school days.

My overall impression of the piece was that it was well laid out, informitive, and concise. It lets a potential writer know what a reader is looking for when their piece is read. Write On!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this message forum. There are no errors or solutions that I can offer. What I liked was your sig and the idea for the forum. I would like to make a suggestion though. Maybe you could put pics of various animals on the page, since people own almost any type of animal these days. You may receive some interesting responses.My overall impression of the forum is favorable. I'll have to post and tell you about my dog and her exploits.

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