Purveyor of rhyme,
A friend, the troubadour; or--
The sensitive soul. haiku by Eric Wharton
I find that if we lift our eyes just a few times each day, we will discover something poetic that might just touch our hearts.
Of course putting those emotions in a 17-syllable poem is another matter altogether!
A brief explanation of my style of haiku writing, though.
I believe in traditional haiku that must speak about nature and I try to follow the pattern of two lines exposing a particular scene and a third line making a commentary.
And as of mid-August, 2013. I've been experimenting with modern English haiku which doesn't require the stiff 5/7/5 pattern.
However, after my decision to continue the project another year, I have decided to use the haiku structure as a departure for "haiku-like" poems having three lines but not more that 17 syllables.
I like how the warmth of a blanket contrasts with the cold of the rest of the poem. It's surprising, but also a fitting description of how a snowy slope looks, so I think it works well.
I struggled to picture it "distilling hope" though. I'm not sure what this would look like as a physical description, and as an emotional description I couldn't quite see how it fit in. Might it be better to let the implied comfort of a blanket provide the personification?
You capture the chill of winter snow so well. The blanket refuses to melt here and it's making life very difficult. Hope is difficult to maintain sometimes.
How I miss those dreams of youth. Such a good job we don't know what lies ahead. Snow falls here just as hubby is about to be released from hospital. I predicted it as it happened last time and just adds to the difficulties of coping.
If I could put into words how I feel and how life is right now I'm not sure anyone would believe me. Your lovely notebook may hear all about it.
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