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May 23, 2009 at 10:39am
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Edited: May 23, 2009 at 10:39am
Reveiw For: Genesis:
by Sunny
First, thank you for sharing this with me. Second, Sorry it took me a bit to get to this review.

My Thoughts: You have a way with your words, a good story tell as you do have a good keen eye for details

My Favorite Part: Streams of wind twisted into a vortex, forming three cyclones. Small rocks slammed into Lydria's face as they moved towards their opponent, devastating the area as they went. She watched as they moved closer, the razor sharp winds inching closer to Natasheia as she simply stood there smiling.
There are also some other good things in there that I like but this paragraph just stood out to me!

Errors: Not a one, that I saw

Suggestions: Write On


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Reveiw For: Genesis: · 05-23-09 10:39am
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