Sunni's Review &Edit - closed

Thank you for taking the time to review my articles, those three pieces are my very first, and seem to really need some help. the run-on sentence monstor likes to eat my stories, and he's something I've always struggled with. Although I am glad to see that you enjoyed the stories themselves. I will go through and make some corrections as you have pointed out.

Thank you!

P.S.

I will be adding new entries into the "Invalid Item"  Journal, I was waiting for some feedback to see if it was something I should even continue based on the first entry. My first try at a sci-fi/adventure series of stories :) Now that someone has read it, I'll be glad to expand on the idea.