Fantasy Campfires

I thought "the Child" was very good, for a rough draft. You have a good idea, and the descriptions are good. I think that once you begin really creating the world, you will be able to go back to the beginning and make it coincide with the rest of the story. Don't take this the wrong way, but I don't really know how I feel about it, probably because the rest of it isn't posted. I am sure once I read the rest of the story, that I will like it a lot, but as it is, I can't fully enjoy it. Please keep writing it, I want to know what happens.

Pax means peace in Latin

A PeaceKeeper compromises to no avail, a PeaceMaker forces peace and succeeds.

I am proud that the Prez is from my homestate, so KISS OFF, DIXIE CHIX!