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 |  | The Evergreen  [E] God gives what man destroys, then God gives...  |
| (4.5)| A Disclaimer: All the comments are generated from my personal interpretation and spontaneous impression. As the author of this creation you are the sole and ultimate judge of what is best for your expression. I shall be very glad if my views can be of any help.  Title: The poem traces the majestic life-cycle of an evergreen tree. It represents the Nature that is ever reborn by God's infinite Grace. Thus the title is a compressed summation of the theme. Wonderfully chosen! Concept and The Underlying Idea: The evergreen trees do not bear fruit or give forth an effervescence of blossoms. They stand tall and are living symbols of Earth's resilience and huge power to generate and perpetuate. This power kindles and nurtures the imagination of a poet. This idea is represented by the 'Quill' or the feathery bird. The ambiguous position of gripping a 'spinning Terra Firma' and be straight is the riddle nature has solved. Man cannot tune his faculties to this transcendental enigma of "true beauty',which is 'crowned' or recognized by 'heaven'. So they burn and destroy and deforest. The 'hull' of the ship spinning in a boundless Universe, i.e. Earth, is thus ignorantly destryed by impatient Man bent on fulfilling his immediate need like a beast. Still Life replenishes its store and God's abundant blessings forgive and shower again. Form: I think I can see the form of a tall evergreen tree in the arrangement of the lines. The lines contain a slim variation of one to eight syllables,without any visible rhyme scheme. Though some lines end in apparently similar-sounding syllables, they do not qualify as rhyming. I don't feel that is the poet's intention either.The tell-tale colours synchronize with the mood and purport of the lines quite beautifully and seamlessly. This improvisation is successfull because they enter into our notice only in a second reading. In my opinion, this is how it should be. I am sorry if I have missed any other poetry form in there, because that is not my strong point.  Impression of the Idea: The idea is not unique, but it is highly in context with the theme. Thematic Suggestion: None whatever, because the poet has done a stunning job there. Grammar and vocabulary: The diction is overall simple, which, in my opinion, adds a charm to nature poetry. The words like 'terra firma' or 'cedes' adds a different tang to the general flow. The latinism is conducive to the grandness of the implication, but I cannot see that 'cedes' was absolutely necessary. Description: The poet gives us the abstract detail to explain how the actual situation is generalized to reach the ideal situation. So the actual detailing of the particular tree is rather obscured. Still,it would be more vivid and so beneficial for the reader in evoking the similar emotions as in the poet. Style of writing: It is basically effortless,but capable. Kudos and Applauds: To my delight, the poet has used the metonymy AND transferred epithet in a single word 'Quill'. It means the bird, not the plume that writes-- so it's Metonymy. It means the bird that roosts, not the plume! Very nice!  Areas to work on: Not much to mention. My favourite expression: Majestic and proud, she blindly battles elements that sting the air. Please write on! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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