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| Happy Earth Day LeyMantra! it will take me a while to get used to writing that new handle!!  Cruising your port and I found this Tanka poem I hadn't read yet.. The form is well accomplished and suits the seasonal weather theme. I really like the energy of the words "barrel" and "monsters". A bit of humour is in the evocative third line, with the unique perspective on "meet and greet" Brilliant!  The next line has an effective essence as well. I like the connection of the big wind to staying by the fire. good choice of related idea as it speaks to the power of the the Noreaster!. "may start" is rather drab with the "may" being tentative compared to "barrel" but maybe that is showing part of its unpredictablity? I enjoyed playing in your tanka with it vivid centre line. Very imaginative!  I have never done one before but I am be inspired to compose one. Thanks for sharing this fine example. Ilike the simplicity of the language. Light on the path as you write on! eyestar  
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You responded to this review 04/24/2011 @ 10:57pm EDT