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 Fate  [E]
Short poem about a twist of fate in 1968 (the assassination of Robert Kennedy)
by Stephanie
Review of Fate  
Review by gladiola
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Stephanie
This is gladiola and I am pleased to offer my review for your poem entitled Fate.
As a reviewer, I only offer my point of view and it is up to you to decide what fits.

Concept/Premise *RollEyes*
A twist of fate. What a concept! Fate is really so powerful and can change the way things happen.

What I liked most : *ThumbsUp*
If fate's twisted hand did not cruelly ordain
that this is the position where we must remain
Those two lines are my favourite and they show the power of fate and how it could change lives and determine what it will be like.

Spelling and grammar *Magnify*
Oh (of)?all the things that could have been


*Sun*Suggestions:*Sun*
To be honest, I guess there is a bit of elaboration needed here, like show exactly what happened in 1968 because I am not sure. What were the consequences and how fate was cruel towards them.
Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart.
William Wordsworth



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Reviewed By Gladiola


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