Killing time? [13+] Why do we think we can Kill Time and be of good mental health? |
Happy Birthday from "Invalid Item" A Review from Pat's Porch Hello, Michaelmountain:spring hope ! Won't you join me on the porch for a nice cold glass of freshly-squeezed lemonade? Grab one of Granny's tea cakes and have a seat in the swing so we can get started. I am reviewing "Killing time?" as part of your shower from "Invalid Item" . Thank you for allowing me to share my thoughts with you. "Disclaimer" Please keep in mind that all I can do is offer my opinions and suggestions. Feel free to take what you can benefit from and discard anything else. Content Rating: Your essay is fine with the rating of 13+. That is a cautious rating, and that is always preferred when one is in doubt. The of the Matter It was good to read something real about the way we use our time. As young people, we thought we had a million years before we got "old." As time passed by, we came to realize more and more the importance of using time wisely. Still, so many of us squander our time with television and other unproductive activities. I don't claim to be innocent of wasting time, but the more I fill my life with creative activities, thinking activities, the less time I have to squander. Not long ago I was addicted to TV. Now I can't find time to watch it. The best part is that I don't miss it. Michael, I like the way you talk about finding what you need by giving up things that you don't need. But you write about something deeper. You write about standing still and listening for God to speak to you. Stand still; be quiet and think about the internal landscape. That's a great term. What Else? I thought it might read better if you change the second in to of. See what you think: There is even more time for the internal landscape that somehow gets bypassed in the valley in of a 9 to 5 existence. I also found some minor punctuation errors at the end. Here are the commas needed: Sun, moon, and stars rise in my soul, and life has the feel... Adding the Bow to the Package There are several favorite lines. "There is even more time for the internal landscape that somehow gets bypassed in the valley in a 9 to 5 existence." "Ask the wind as it cools and caresses your skin." You are a great writer, Michael. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this essay. I'll try my best to get back for another. Keep writing. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" . ~~Image #6000 Sharing Restricted~~
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