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 Years  [E]
A free verse poem with a warning
by Itchy Water~fictionandverse
Review of Years  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings Itchy Water
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*Idea* TYPE: Poem   *Clock2* LINES: 15


*Pencil*   Subject
Years – A poem about growing old without making memories.

*Music2*   Form & Feeling
This poem expresses deep regret for a past not worth remembering, and you've accomplished it using only a few, well-chosen words. Being among the older generation, I can totally relate to what you're saying. Although I don't see my life as wasted, I kick myself for letting days go by without making better use of them. The plea at the end was a nice touch that actually turns the sorrowful tone of the piece into an inspirational one.

*Magnify*   Technical
You have beautiful wording and writing. I couldn't find anything that needed changing.

*Paw*   Overall
It's a wonderful poem with deep meanings that are memorable and witty. Excellent job!

*Heart*   Favorite Part
So I count on my fingers.
I need my other hand—
Not enough hands
To count the years it has been.
(This is my favorite stanza because it mixes humor with the regret.)


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