It is my pleasure to review
"Why I like to review" 
in affiliation with "Invalid Item" 
as a Member-2-Member Review

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about reviewing with us and for entering the SAJ essay contest on the subject of reviewing. I have to say that I love your picture at the top of your essay. The kitten seems to be actually reading. It's been a long time since I've had a kitten in the house. All of my fur balls are getting on up there in age. Anyway... back to my review of your reviewing essay.

Boy, I can certainly relate to your first impressions of WDC. I, too, was struck by the size of the membership and the content of material and all the activities and groups to explore. I was like a kid in a candy store, wanting everything but able to only digest a little at a time.

I was intrigued by your idea that by offering a full spectrum of what a story contained, other members who read your review would want to read your reviewee's story too, thus spreading the reviewing process.

You brought up an interesting point in that reviewing is an on-going commitment which seems to complete a circle. We reviewers keep clearing Pat's garden, but it keeps on growing, and, yes, that's what it's really all about. Well put, Jeannie!!


I'd like to help you out with some suggestions for some grammar issues that I ran into, if I may, for your consideration. Overall, you did a great job with your punctuation, especially your commas. You must have had a great instructor in that area.

You wrote:
I’ve been a member now for almost two years now.
This is probably a typo and you didn't realize you had used the word now twice in close proximity making it redundant.

You wrote:
...such as the tools author’s authors use which make posting your writings on-site easier.
and
I also took note on what these author's authors expressed that they wanted to know in a review.
In the context of these sentences, the word "authors" is not used as a possessive form of that word, so no apostrophe should be used.

You wrote:
Pat's cute write up on letting everyone know that her birthday fell around the same time as WDC's anniversary. The color and images she showed on her write-up were so appealing, it caught my attention.
Hmm... that first sentence is actually not a complete sentence at all. Let's see what we can do here.
Pat's cute write-up on letting everyone know that her birthday fell around the same time as WDC's anniversary and the color and images she showed on her write-up were so appealing that it caught my attention.
By the way, I remember when Pat did this in 2011. I thought her birthday announcements were pretty funny, too.

You wrote:
I was really tempted to join; but felt...
I wouldn't use a semicolon here, but a comma would work because even though you don't have an independent clause after the coordinating conjunction but, you are expressing contrast.
I was really tempted to join, but felt...

You wrote:
I sometimes get my reading material by clicking on the random button, and staring back at me was Pat's story.

She again offered me membership to her group, and this time, I agreed wholeheartedly.

Pat is right,; being part of this group is a joy.

Thank you for this opportunity to review your work. My suggestions and opinions are offered only in the spirit of helpfulness from one aspiring writer to another.

  Winnie Kay  



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .