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Review of Magic Pink Chalk  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Grace♥Leo health issues
It is my pleasure to read your story and give you a M2M “Happy Birthday” review. Please remember, I'm a writer just like you and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work.


*BurstBL*OVERALL SENSE: I was so touched reading this story. This is exactly what a child would do… Their love for their mother is greater than life itself to them. Just knowing her mommy is going to get better became enough for this little girl. I wish there’s more love like this is the world…

Once again, a great story from you. Naturally, it would be a pink chalk... Let me guess, pink is your favorite color.

         *BulletV*TITLE APPEAL: “Magic Pink Chalk” is the title for this story.

The description underneath reads, “A child’s love, a choice and some decisions are forever.”

         *BulletV*STYLE/VOICE: The style is spiritual, children’s, and emotional.

The voice stays strong as we follow your main character through this one chance in life, finding a magic chalk lying alongside a path and it speaks to her, “Be wise and draw whatever you like, just remember, it will come to life.”

         *Bullet*TONE/MOOD: The tone of this story is a commanding chalk, a bemused main character, and a forthright decision to give the chalk to a sick child.

The mood is contemplative at first, then excited at being given this chance, and later, when a child makes a decision, it saddens the main character.

         *BulletR*SCENE/SETTING: The scene and setting takes place on a sidewalk when a pink chalk is spied lying discarded by some neighborhood kids.

         *Woman**Man*CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: Just by simply showing your readers how your characters play out their roles in this story, their development shows itself clearly.
The little girl— She has a heart of girl with so much love for her mother.
The main character— She’s been given an opportunity to make things come true.
The pink chalk— Appears to the main character for a reason, I feel. I don’t think it was too happy with his chosen benefactor on how she handled his instructions.

Personality: All the personalities of these character were well defined.

Motivation: The pink chalk was magical, he chose the main character in the knowledge that she will be careful in her drawing on what will come to life.

         *Thought*PLOT: Well thought out on an interesting plot.

Structure: Well put together. As each scene is revealed, you, as a reader wonder what they would do if put in such a situation.

Development: The story moves along as you begin to wonder what the main character will draw.

*BurstG*GRAMMAR/SPELLING/SENTENCE STRUCTURE: I didn’t find any errors. Just maybe would have written this sentence a little differently.
Shhh, hurry put me in your pocket and run!”—Shhh, hurry… Put me in your pocket and run! ~Or ~ You can put a comma after hurry.

*BurstP*AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: NONE

         *BulletR*LIKES: I like this story, there are so many scenarios where this story could have gone. It was a sad ending, but I’m happy with the little girl drawing. She was given something special which she didn’t take lightly. She drew what was in her heart.

         *BulletR*DISLIKES: NONE

*BurstB*FAVORITE LINE(S): I did have some favorite lines that I would like to highlight. I'll explain why I like them and how they added to the story.

         *Cut* QUOTE HERE: *Cut* Quickly, I found a granny square I had been crocheting and set the chalk on it so it would have a soft place to rest. She smiled and laid her head down and was soon snoring softly. I sat on the couch and contemplated what to do with this magical chalk.

         *Idea* My Comment: This was a touching scene where the main character shows compassion. A cute scene with the snoring and everything. Grace, you did a good job with bringing this chalk to life for your readers.

*BurstR*JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION: A story that makes you think. Compassion is out there, and with some people, it all comes so naturally. We need more stories as this one. Good job! Thank you for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece.

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