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 | Dwelling Between the Lines  [E] For Take My Phrase: Free verse of good versus evil  |
| (5.0)| Review especially for you.  This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  WHY I'M REVIEWING FOR YOU  Group/purpose: This gift is just for you so you can write with might and gift delight to readers through out WDC with confidence and best ability! Title: Dwelling Between the LinesI know there is black and there is while, however inbetween is gray, so I decided to see if this is what is within this writing. Description: For Take My Phrase: Free verse of good versus evilmay also refer to "for sake my phrase. which is the first thing that comes to my mind. Then "forte' is my next thought. You have piqued my interest, so I will read your poem.  FIRST IMPRESSIONS Deep and thorough though has been injected into this poem.  I LIKE What and why: The simple and direct statements about how you believe and feel the lines are in relation to each other and intertwined. Your approach and the effects of distance and getting closer are described well and give the reader clues about how you are seeing first the lind, then the separation of the line into two distinct lines each with their own identity and features. The second verse describes the first line, which I guess is the one on top or nearest the approach. It is white, stretching as far as the eye can see, containing, laughter, light, music of joy, and I suspect all good things. I like and enjoy reading the good news and good elements of the first verses of this poem because it is music to my mind, spiritually uplifting, happiness and joy, and gives me reason to smile and believe that God dwells within the good ness of the good in the white line. The other line of evil I guess and see nad believe to be black, searing pain of fire and heat, and sin over taking all as weeds overtake the ground is what I see and believe about this line. The feeling of horror and foreboding grip me slightly because I hold onto the good at the beginning with my belief that the good and God will prevail. The wildflowers that prick for me can be either evil pricking and prodding towards eternal damnation, or wild flowers of chastening from God taking over the evil and gently moving the person towards eternal life. The last two verses tell of the gray area which is small, a place I think of as without saltiness. When salt looses it's saltiness, scripture states that it is good for nothing but to be cast out and tread underfoot. This for me and I believe is like not hot and not cold but warm. Hot can be changed and cold can be changed but warm is stuck in the middle and has no place to go or possibility of progress. While on earth for me this is the worst place to be because I will be goiod for nothing and give nothing. The only good warm gives is a warm drink, or warm bath or shower and I prefer more than warm. Warm people are usually stuck spiritually and emotionally. Miraculously they can be changed, yet often the sad truth is this is the worst place. To be fiery, red, hot is to have a change of mind and become as white as snow living righteously. I like all of this poem because it covers all of the stages of life and feelings and beliefs. It is a story of choices. My favorite verses are the first two which tell about the lines and then the white line. plot: I believe your plot to the story of our possible choices, redemption and salvation, and What happens depending on the choices we make in life. You presented this story well and with character and imagination which brings to life in my mind visions as in movie frames showing details of scenes pictures of the events of humankind and the decisions which determine our eternal everlasting future. Rhythm: I read you poem enjoying each word and stanza as I determined the rhythm and pace of my experience learning about the contents with in your word art.  OBSERVATION(S) I believe this poem could warn people about the choices they make for their future should they look closely and examine their lives.  QUESTION(S) When, how, and why did you get this inspiration to write this poem?  SUGGESTIONS AND COMMENTS: You write well and give to the reader words to think by. My thoughts and ideas which may be of interest to you: I believe that God our heavenly gave you the talent to write this poem.  CONCLUSION(S) Please keep sharing your writing with readers. My thoughts and Impressions: I enjoy reading and reviewing, and writing to share my thoughts and ideas with readers. God has given to me writing.com which for me is a precious gift for anyone who enjoys these activities. It is my pleasure to meet you, visit with you through our WdC activities, and read and review for you. Safe travels and many blessings. This review is given on behalf of "Showering Acts of Joy Group"   Welcome to WDC from all of us at "Invalid Item" You are being reviewed by "Reviewing Reviewers ~ ON HIATUS" [E]! Feel free to check us out to find out our purpose on Writing.Com.My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 02/19/2014 @ 3:53pm EST