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Review by Nixie
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Overall Impression
I liked the intimate voice in this piece. You welcome the reader in by offering a striking first paragraph. To be human is to face some sort of drama. The repetition of "disappoint" was effective in delivering your message.

This transferred nicely into the second paragraph where the reader learns a bit about birding. The scope of the project caught me by surprise.

The third paragraph had a delicate twist toward humor, which left me smiling.

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Thoughts on a personal level
Cardinals have an uncanny way of finding me when I'm most upset. I look at them as my reminder "No need to worry. Look, we're here with our bright reds to cheer you." And it works like magic. Often times it tears me up.

Fine Tuning ▼

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Closing thoughts
If this is a "work in progress" I'd say you're progressing quite well. Underneath your pen, the topic kept my attention. The additional half star came from the laugh you shared in the conclusion. The use of [proper] was the key. *Checkg*

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