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| Hello Teerich - 2019  :  I have the honor of reviewing your writing for "Simply Positive Review Forum " . Please remember I am a writer, who, like yourself, is also reviewed by her peers; therefore, I know what it feels like! I have only my humble opinion to offer; please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!  TITLE As I was strolling through your portfolio, searching for something to read, I came across this poem, and I'm glad I stopped to read it. Great job on the title!   SPELLING, GRAMMAR, & PUNCTUATION Regarding spelling, grammar, and punctuation, I could find no errors. Good job!  POETRY FORM, RHYME, & RHYTHMThis poem is written in free rhymed verse with great rhythm and flow. Very nicely done!  CHOICE OF WORDS/READABILITY Choice of words is excellent which makes for good readability. When I read the poem out loud, I did not stumble or falter. I could understand the poem and it told a story, which I enjoyed. Very nice job!  FAVORITE PARTS I enjoyed the entire poem, but let me tell you about some of my favorite parts: *stargray* a staggering figure heaved his load, ploughed a woeful furrow. - I CHOSE THESE LINES BECAUSE THEY PAINT SUCH A SORROWFUL PICTURE AND HELPED TO CREATE THE OPENING SCENE OF YOUR POEM. THEY SET THE MOOD. GOOD JOB WITH THIS! *stargray* Tenderly, his family laid him, finally, to rest; I CHOSE THESE LINES, BECAUSE I ESPECIALLY LIKED THE PART ABOUT HIS FAMILY AND I LIKED THE WAY YOU USED THE WORD "TENDERLY". I FELT THIS WAS ESPECIALLY MOVING. NICE JOB! *stargray* The Son of God had risen, as Our Father said he should, - I CHOSE THESE LINES BECAUSE THEY ARE A GREAT WAY TO END YOUR POEM; THEY ARE THE PERFECT ENDING, OF COURSE! GOOD JOB!  OVERALL RATING/FINAL THOUGHTSI give this poem an overall rating of   for its creativity, originality, and ability to tell the story of the crucifixion and resurrection of our Lord in just four verses. Not only that, but you have done it very well. Of course, there is much more to the story than just that, but considering the length of the poem, I think you have managed to capture the feeling and mood in an excellent way. I could feel the sorrow and pain, especially in the first three verses. I think you have done a fine job of capturing this mood within just that short amount of words. Very nicely done! You keep writing and I'll keep reading! Please continue to share with our community. Thank you for allowing me to review your work. I consider it an honor and a privilege! Have a  lovely  day! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .Cindy  ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/23/2014 @ 9:03pm EDT