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 |  | Lady In A Golden Dress  [E] Autumn is a beautiful lady.  |
| (4.5)  HI Brenpoet! Happy Earth Day!   Oh I so appreciate the lyrical sound and imagey of your verse. The magical vibe of fall as a lady is appealing. The form is balanced and the rhythm and rhyme of your descriptive weave made it a joy to read aloud. I did notice a few lines out of the flow in syllable if youwere aiming at a steady flow form. Line 2 verse 2 longer, last line verse 3 shorter, line 4 verse 1 you could drop the "and" to have it match.  I could easily feel the vibe of the poem and its rather philosphical undertone. The personification is perfect for the theme and I visualize an earth mother figure watching the dance from every tree. The reference to the youth of spring was fun too and speaks to the cycles of nature and the goddess. I think of Persephone and Demeter. The picture that graces the page is unique art piece and sets off the poem aesthetically on the page. I really enjoyed the colourful dance of your vision!  Thanks for sharing your gift.Light on the path as you write on! eyestar 
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