Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

How I found your piece...I am still attempting to review all participants in The Game of Thrones. I have finished 2 of the house! Maybe I will finish them all by fall!

First impressions...The first thing I want to say is that this review is purely my opinion, use what you can and ignore the rest. I know it can be difficult to be reviewed on such a personal piece.

I enjoyed reading your letter immensely, the fact that you have been so open and honest with yourself and the rest of us is truly wonderful. I hope you and your family are doing well. I also hope that you have kicked the smoking habit for all of your family! Great job on accomplishing all that you had in the year you wrote this!

Technical items;

In the second paragraph aunt's should be aunts

In the third paragraph I believe the sentence Though you lost.... should be combine with the next sentence , God... The first sentence is only a phrase and needs to be part of the larger piece.

Eliminate getting slow in the sentence... "So far in 2011, you have been getting slow...

Lastly, I would maintain either first person or second person throughout the whole letter instead of bouncing between them. It would make it an easier read.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this and feel like a learned a great deal about you.

Nice job!


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