Hello Megan,

I found your story "Invalid Item"  to be a very pleasant read.

I don't pretend to be an English major or an expert in grammar. I am simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work. I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression:
I thought your story was easy to read and follow. The imagery you described and the descriptive language you used in your story allowed me to put myself in the story. I could visualize the scene, the landscape, and feel the emotions the rider felt. I thought your choice of words was what gave your story life. I was somewhat puzzled at the current 3.5 rating your story has. I personally feel it is worth more than that rating.

Grammar and Mechanics:
I saw no problems with your writing mechanics or grammar

Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is to keep putting pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) You are very talented and I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work.

I also see you are new to WDC and want to welcome you

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud

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