I found myself quite caught up in your story, it has an interesting plot that could go in many different ways. Inner dialogue of wife provides plenty of detail and background to hook reader. She was very easy to visualize and relate to as was her husband. I would have liked to see a bit more conflict/resentment at end to carry storyline into next chapter with a more dramatic promise, perhaps a few whispered/ thoughts from wife? Suspicions? Threats about his treatment of her? I didn't see any grammatical or other mistakes I'd change and am looking forward to your next chapter! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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