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One of the first things that stands out is that the rating of this is incorrect. This is not E for everyone, due to the language in one small section. Please review the rules and regulations for rating at "Content Rating System (CRS)" if you have any questions as to what the rating for these song lyrics should be.

To me, songs are poetry to music. That being said, I look upon song lyrics as poems that are read. To better help the reader understand the meaning behind the lyrics and poem, formatting can be used to help showcase metaphorical depth.

Not many authors, or readers, give much thought to placement or alignment, when it comes to poetry. It is my thought that something as simple as where or how you place a poem on the page, can add to its imagery. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all the lines are askew, based upon the character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal feelings on the subject, and not all will agree with this. Though, it does give one something to consider.

I think reformatting this so that the long sentences and small paragraphs become more like short verses, would help to illustrate on paper the lyrics of this song. I feel doing so gives strength to the lyrics and offers up a better platform for those who read them. For instance:

You wrote: It's time to make choices at the brink of demise. What shall I say to provoke your mind? "God is dead", "We are already dead"? Have one in mind? Oh, just too many kinds.

I suggest:
It's time to make choices
at the brink of demise.
What shall I say to provoke your mind?
"God is dead",
"We are already dead"?
Have one in mind?
Oh, just too many kinds.


Overall an interesting set of lyrics. I imagine this song to be one of the rap genre. It has a rating flaw, but other than that this is a sound piece of writing. Keep up the great work.

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