Hi regal .
My name is Carly and I am doing this review on behalf of "Invalid Item"  and the WDC Senior Mod. Contest.
I have just read your monologue "Invalid Item" , which I found when searching for a Newbie to read and wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. You are welcome to use or disregard any of my advise.


Overall Impressions:
I was moved by your content and found it resonated with it. I thought it interesting that you started with a story of a man suffering with Post Tramatic Stress Syndrome and how he rushes to get back to the 'noise of life'.


Favourite Part:
I enjoyed the content and it resonated with me.
Quietude.
Noise of life.


Suggestions:
Oh of the things that gave me pause was the layout of your piece. It is a monologue which is going to be packed with your thoughts but I think for visual relief if you put spaces between your paragraphs it would help to open the piece up. It is so word packed it is a bit overwhelming - word noise.


Additional Comments:
I really enjoyed your piece and the content. Keep writing.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!