Death Of A Thousand Cuts [13+] Thoughts on love, in the briefest possible form (vers libre) |
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Hello Ben Garrick This poem is a thoughtful rumination on love and the pain that can be associated with it. I'm sure many readers will relate to the subject matter here. Many of us have been hurt by love after all. I like how you go from the idealisation of youth (unable to imagine love dying) to the pain of experience. Poems about love are so commonplace, it's really hard to say anything new on the subject but you make a good job here of avoiding clichés. You convey a lot of meaning in few words. I found the flow a little uneven, partly due to the variety of line lengths you use I wonder if your single line middle stanza could be split into two after the word 'created'. This is just a suggestion obviously but it might make for a more steady pace. I have no other suggestions. Overall I thought this was a good piece of writing. Thanks for sharing your work. Write on! Best wishes, Mark ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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