Review number # 2 of week September 18-24, 2014

Hi Kris

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Diamond in the Rough

First Impression: The loneliness and the betrayal are very clear from the beginning. My heart saddened for the author.

What I liked: I read it out loud very easily, the words flowed smoothly. The words the author chose created a very poignant image of a broken heart.

What needs your attention: I like poems centered on the page, to me it reflects the authors confidence in his/her work. Your poem deserves to confidently spring from the center of the page.

Favorite Parts: It's not that I'm not beautiful, intelligent or good enough, Its simply that you can't handle a diamond in the rough. I felt that was a powerful closing to a very difficult situation. I felt proud for the young woman to realize it was not her but him that was not ready for the relationship and that she had done nothing wrong. So many young people feel they failed in a relationship because they didn't do enough. It is so sad. All relationships should be based on equality from day one not one person always doing more to make it work.

Overall Impression: I felt your Diamond in the Rough was well written and spoke volumes for your potential as a writer. I hope to see more of your work on WDC.
We are glad you joined us here. We hope you find everything you need and so much more!

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .