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 The Burial  [ASR]
Challenge: Write a murder mystery (with a twist)in only two sentences.
by Maineiac
Review of The Burial  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hello Newbie! Welcome to WDC. *Flipflops5*
This is a Simply Positive Review.

Well I must admit, your brief description compelled me to read this story. It was a requirement that it had to be only two sentences, plus there has to be a twist. Quite a challenge, indeed! *Checkv*

*Thought* Did you describe a murder and have a twist in the end? Yes! And indeed it was in two sentences.

Well done!

Observation:

"and now she has begin laughing." [has begun] It's those little errors that stand out boldly. When there are only two sentences, you can't afford to make mistakes. *Wink*


I like the images conjured in my mind about this guy unable to leave the forest and the return to the grave where she was buried. You let the reader's imagination fill in the story in her mind's eye. Way to draw the reader in! *Clip*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch



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