Review number # 5 of week Oct. 2-8th, 2014

Hi Samantha,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Broken Up By A Lie.

First Impression: I remembered my days in high school, the author reminded me of those crazy days.

What I liked: The conversation between the girls and how everything seems so important.

What needs your attention: Grammar, spelling and punctuation, all need to be fixed. You should consider taking one of New Horizons Classes here on WDC to help you.

Favorite Parts: The realization that Katie had lied to her and the awkward situation in the car. The image you created clearly showed in the words and Maria's discomfort that she was caught in this lie.

Overall Impression: The story has potential once you fix all the spelling errors, grammar and punctuation. I realize you are a newbie but there are many available writer tools here on WDC to help you create wonderful stories without errors. I am looking forward to see you grow as an author. I wish you luck with your writing.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .