Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

How I found your piece...I decided to go through my list of favorite authors and review a piece from each one, needless to say you are on my list.

First impressions...I just finished the first group of poems for Poetic Exploration and when I found your folder I decided to see what you had written for the assignments

Was the title interesting...your title describes the type of poem you wrote for the Poetic Exploration Group but you not a true title for your piece.

Was the content rating appropriate...yes

Did you use a specific form of poetry...Lanturne

Did you follow the form...yes, the syllable counts were correct at 1,2,3,4,1

Was there a rhyme scheme- what was it...n/a

Were words forced to fit syllable count...no, you did a wonderful job creating a scene with a syllable count that is so low. I find it difficult to write poems with such constraints. Great job!

Was there rhythm and flow...yes, supplied by the imagery you used and the alliteration in the fourth line.

Any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation...none noted

Things I would change...I would not change anything

Favorite parts/lines...I like;

warm sand welcomes
toes

These lines make me want to go to the beach and sink my toes into the sand. (Except all we have is snow right now)

Another great job!


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