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The Yellow Rose  [13+]
A poem about independence, and being who you truly are.
by StarvingArtist
Review of The Yellow Rose  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello, StarvingArtist . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Snow1*

*Ornament2r* General Impressions: This is a metaphorical poem about the beauty that can come from natural uniqueness. There is a garden with a single yellow rose among the red ones and the narrator instinctively wants to pluck it because it doesn't match the rest. He decides not to though and it end up being the tallest rose in the garden. I think this poem is about not judging a book by its cover and accepting the differences in people and things. It's an age old lesson, but always an important one.

*Ornament1g* Best Parts: I liked the part where the rose spoke directly to the narrator and told him that it had its own path to go in life and to leave it be. At a younger age, I think we're often sort of told what to do and how to be. It works for some kids, but some of them don't work well with that kind of direction. I don't think it's uncommon for a kid like that to grow up independent and used to doing their own things, standing taller (so to speak) than others. The rose is the same way.

*Ornament3r* Possible Suggestions: I would suggest breaking this poem up into stanzas with four lines per because it goes well with the rhyming pattern. So instead of just one piece, I might suggest:

Walking through the garden,
one bright morning in July,
a single rose sprouting up,
suddenly caught my eye.

For this one single rose,
was different from the rest...

On and on like so. I think 'instead' should be capitalized in the line instead I left it because it's the start of a new sentence.

*Ornament4g* Summary: Overall, this was a fun read and it flowed pretty well throughout. My only suggestion would be on the formatting. Thanks again for sharing with us!

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