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Review of Life and Love  
Review by JACE
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi S Ferguson~ Prepping for Prep .

I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Invalid Item"  for the "I Write Romantic in Winter" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. This is a very short look at the musings of a professed cynic. And yet these are thoughts I suspect we all have had from time to time. I know I have. I'm much older than you and sometimes wonder if love is real, or if certain feelings have just become comfortable with time.

You stated: "I don't think love should be able to change so easily from a family love to a romantic love." I disagree. I think love exists to allow us to handle all the different relationships that we will have in our lifetimes. I take stock of all the experiences in my life, and believe love does exist ... and it exists in many forms. Perhaps that the best way to describe love, One answer does not fit all.

In my opinion, the questions and thoughts you raise in your short missive are the things everyone considers. I would hope your thinking of this subject will order your thoughts on love and help you come to terms with that illusive concept.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I found only two items.

         *Bullet* Separate these thoughts with a period.   I have dated men I have siblings and nieces and nephews.  I have dated men. I have siblings and nieces and nephews.

         *Bullet* This line seemed awkward to me. I wasn't sure what you meant to say. This is two differing thoughts joined in the same sentence.  Some people are capable of love, there are just too many stipulations that accompany it.  

*Star* My Rating. 4.0 . 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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