Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

TITLE: Perfect title for the Acrostic, I choose this poem to review because I know Eyestar as well and I was curious as to what you would write.

THEME: The theme is perfect in keeping with Eyestar joining WdC. I t is amazing how many of us have just randomly landed on this site! You did a great job conveying this to the reader.

TONE: The tone is upbeat and you keep to this with the whimsical words you use, like the 'ding' of the alarm.

PACE/FLOW: The pace and flow is fast, the words you use underlie this tone, nothing quite as bad as the alarm not going off!

RHYTHM/METER: Because this is an Acrostic there is no predetermined meter, but you manage to pull it off well. I had always thought of Acrostics as just lists but after reading a few really good ones on this site, yours included, I understand they are a complete poem. Good Job!

RHYME: Your use of rhyme in the first few lines is wonderful, I think I would have liked to have seen it continued through the whole piece, but that is just my opinion.

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: Your wonderful imagery paints a great picture of a morning where the alarm doesn't go off and time is lost. You use alliteration very well. Alas and Alack! Love it!

EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES: My favorite line has to be...

"Alas and alack, I do vow to no longer waste even a moments time".

Excellent job!


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