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Hello there, giventaste
This is a Simply Positive Review! *Die1*

*Crayons* I saw your item on the "Review Me" page, and thought I'd give it look. *Smile*

*Pin* I think you really did a good job, fleshing out the assonance in this poem. You captured the very lyrical quality of it within the rhyme and meter.

*Suitspade* The poem itself had a curious story woven within the lines to make the reader picture it. The relationship theory of one person being dishonest in the relationship -- a trickster, and less than pure of heart with another, seems to pop out from the verses.

Nicely done! *Scallopp*

Observation:

"Please does not weep" [do]

At least that's what I think you meant to put here. The "does" doesn't make sense in this line. Could be just my interpretation, though.

*Flipflops1* I like that the rhyme lines were not just exact rhyme words but those that give the appearance of rhyme through there near-rhyme, rhythmic sounds. I like that because sometimes pure rhyme poetry can get monotonous and sound forced for the sake of the rhyme word.

Well done! *Teab*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch




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