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Review #4132837
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 "Buyer Beware"  [13+]
A Poem about the trials of raising a child B-item: {2046885}
by Annie
Review of "Buyer Beware"  
Review by Cubby
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Greetings from House Florent, "King's Landing updating " !

Hi! My name is Cubby and I will be providing you with feedback today.

*Castle* Thank you for submitting your entry in the "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week" . *Bigsmile*

*Sun* What I really liked about it: What a cute twist on Buyer's Beware (Caveat Emptor)! And with a message about being careful on how you raise your child. I really liked the part where you mention the money alone is not enough to raise a child. So true! Though I've seen other parents think this way. It's too bad--so sad. Kids who are raised with lots of love and care and quality attention, even with little money, have great memories and seem to have respect for others and turn out just fine.

*Clouds* You might want to consider: There was a little misspelling typo... an innocent slip in the third couplet, first line: waht should be what. *Wink* Your rhythm is really pretty good, though there are a few lines you might want to work on. *Smile*

*Starb* Final thoughts... Great rhyming! Nice little story with a lesson weaved in. Cute and fun! I liked it a lot.

Good luck in the contest.

Have a great day and...
*Tulipp*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Tulipp*

Cubby ")

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