If I understood correctly, you got the other comments I made in the IM boxes but the rest can go here?
I was doing a line by line review and will continue to do more on this page.

I shuddered(.) {Make it a shorter sentence} This was the first time I had ever been made to expose my wings.--If they were not open wide, how did the others hide behind you? If you were supposed to stay hidden, why did the head girl make you go and give you something to wear that fit the wings?

Each girl between two boys is easier said, 'boy girl, boy girl'

Why was she going to a different spot to stand. If the change isn't important, just say Mintora mentioned or coughed to let her know to stand with him.

Two companions slid down from two of the dragons-Two of the companions slid from their dragons....should companions have a capital letter to show they are not the companions in the line? If it's a title, use a capital. and the rearrangement is my way of showing it tighter, or clearer, up to you.

Mintora to see he was scared so bad(ly)--
it is assumed you grabbed his hand with yours and not our teeth, lol so you can shorten it further, You did say it was a short story, so I assume word count?

I squeezed his hand in mine...-
His trembling calmed down some in response to my squeezing.-- you can shorten more

I squeezed his hand in mine and his trembling soon stopped, or soon slowed.

leaf in the wind as to show Mintora --in the wind to show...-Take out the 'as'

She is 'just' an embarrassment -Id take out 'just' since it diminishes how much she is.

over." the den mother --start the new sentence with a capital-

Well(,) he is strong and more than able--

Did they look at all ten of you, or only you and Mintora (is he brother or boyfriend?)

Tell you what(,)this time we will take--

Don't capitalize all of BUT...sentences don't start with but, however, they can start with 'However'...

Not expect them to do what every time. Clarify. Do not expect us to take a winged person, or a boy and girl, or two of the children? Are they slaves?

Why turn back to the dragons to learn something? You didn't tell us, are they telepathic? Sneak a sentence in the explain to us...with that they turned back to the dragons. (With needs a capital) I wondered if they were communicating telepathically as I'd heard about....or something.

Abrupt change from you to Mintora...

want me. Suddenly I realized Mintora had broken down-

What do you mean, 'what if I fall" who said that? Mintora?...and the answer 'darling'. So she is his mom or they are sweethearts? As a reader, I need clarification.

I hope this and the other remarks in IM are of some help. Fix the goofs and I can re rate it higher.
love, LinnAnn