Greetings, Word Warrior beating cancer!! ! Thank you for submitting your entry in the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " .

Prompt: Write a children's mystery that takes place at a campgrounds. You must include dialogue in your story or poem!

Very cute poem, April. Though it's not really a mystery, it's definitely a campfire story to talk about in the dark. Hubby and I both love campfire stories! By the way, your comment in red at the end, actually... seen and been do rhyme in some countries, like England. In American English, however, no... but it's still acceptable as rhyme as far as I'm concerned.

You might want to revisit your punctuation in areas. Commas for pause, periods for ending sentences, and apostrophes to show possession.

Your flow/meter was good most of the time, and you kept your poem exciting right to the very end.

Just out of curiosity, what country were they camping in? I'm not familiar with lemurs... only on the animated cartoon Madagascar. I love that song they sing... I like to move it, move it, move it...

Best of luck in the contest!

Have a great day and...
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !

Cubby ")


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