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 Anubis's Belly  [18+]
A short story based on an Idea I had about my pet snake. Contains vore.
by Ruka Arcana
Review of Anubis's Belly  
Review by jaya h
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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The story is really different, but it needs editing , there are lot of words misplaced or repeated. There is no plot as such, no suspense so the end is really unclear to me. It seems like a sort of game/activity bet snake-a pet- and a pet owner,. The fun part in that is not clear.
A good read,
Jaya H.


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