You painted a very vivid picture in this piece.

I could clearly see the man, sitting there, unaware of how he was destroying his own life.

There is a bitter taste to all of this. But then you throw in the word "goofing" and it lightens things up a bit. It brings to mind the fact that he did not intend for it to happen. And the very sound of the word makes it seem like the narrator looks fondly upon the now dead man.

Such a potent and thought provoking collection of feelings!

And such a beautifully written piece.


The only thing that might benefit from some improvements is the description. "A dear friend whom lost his life and hes children life's to his addiction," should be: "A dear friend who lost his life and his children's lives to his addiction."

Other than that nicely done.

Many thanks for sharing this. And I am so sorry for your loss!

You responded to this review 08/28/2015 @ 4:44pm EDT

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