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| (3.5)  "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"        THIS IS A REVIEW BY THE ANNIVERSARY GROUP IT IS A GIFT FOR YOU!  Item Title: Fear Author: Wiccan 101 Type of writing: PoetryReviewed by:  Lisa Noe First Impression: Hello Wiccan 101, I'd like to wish you a very happy account anniversary, I'm going to give you a detailed review today in order to aid you in becoming a better writer. "Beauty is in our Words"I like that you used all of the senses to describe an emotion of fear, that was very creative, It is important to use all of the senses when we write poetry it makes the poem come alive. in this poem you describe many undesirable smells, sites, etc. to talk about how fear makes you feel it actually turned my stomach as you spoke of curdled milk, and the putrid smell of death among other things. excerpt from writing: The sound of my bones breaking under the weight The water bubbling in my ears as I’m held under The sound of the wind busting through my eardrums Like a 1000 swarming bees suggestions:in the above last sentence I think it should read bursting or would it sound better to say buzzing through my eardrums like 1000 swarming bees. If I were you I would go back and read over the entire poem to capture small little items like that. conclusion:thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You. 
  Lisa Ann Noe ~~Image #4000 Sharing Restricted~~  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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