Hi amyjo-Keeping it real and fun! , I found this piece in your port and thought I'd leave a review for it. I hope you'll find some of my suggestions useful!

What I liked:
I thought this was a very cute children's story. The birthday is all pink, purple, and princess-y, and Susie seems to love that she got to pick the theme and colors.
I thought Susie's energy felt very realistic- who can wait for their birthday at that age?!

General things I noticed/specific suggestions:
Have some dialogue in your story! It's no fun for the reader when the narrator tells you everything. Dialogue will help show the reader what sort of traits your characters have.
I feel like some of this is thought, but it's hard to tell what parts. Try italicizing the thoughts so you can tell it apart from narration.
What is the "one more thing"? Susie wants?

Spelling/Grammar:
You're missing a space after the exclamation mark in "I thought it would NEVER come!Susie"

Overall, I think this piece would benefit from some dialogue. Whether it be Susie talking to herself, or her mother talking to her, it would help lessen the narration and strengthen the character.
Also, I see that this is for the Genre Times Four contest, so make sure you bold the prompt words!
Otherwise, good job on the story- I enjoyed reading it! Thank you for sharing, and keep writing!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .