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*Flower4* Hi boobus! Thanks for sharing this cute, funny story!*Smile* *Flower4*


*Reading*MY INITIAL THOUGHTS*Reading*

I really like this story. It gives a new insight on what the monster under the bed is really up to! *Bigsmile*

● Character(s):

Your characters, Calvin and the monster, are a riot! Such a clever idea. *Stary*


● Storyline/Plot:

I really enjoyed this storyline. It is quite hilarious - especially when the monster said he ate Calvin's sister: "I had a sister?" *Laugh* Priceless!

● Dialogue:

This story being nothing BUT dialogue makes it remarkable. You've done a great job with this.



*Heart* MY FAVORITE PART(S):*Heart*

"Three years?”
“Yeah, it’s been lean picking down here. Sometimes you drop a stuffed animal or maybe kick off a sock, but those are not very filling. I haven’t had a kid’s meal in 3 years.”
“Who’d you eat?”
“Do you remember your little sister, Lysa?”
“No.”
“Exactly. She wasn’t quick enough. Fell out of her crib and I snatched her.”
“Oh my God! MOM! DAD!”" This had me laughing out loud! Hysterical!

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: *Idea*

Only one thing that I found:

"OK. You can have Bunny foo-foo. But that’s it!”


*Vine1*IN CLOSING: *Vine2*

Thanks again for sharing this clever story. I know your readers (maybe not children, lol) will love it as much as I did.

I think you're a very good writer, and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep up the good work, & Keep Writing! *Pencil*




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