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*Balloonp*HI thebusman I am happy to do a review to celebrate you and was happy to find this item to honour the spring! My birthday is in April so double the fun to find this! *Delight*


I so appreciate acrostic poems and this is a finely woven example where you capture the essence of April as the beginning of spring. As I read I could relate to "tries...vestiges of winter" as it does have to work hard. Winter really tried to hang in this April! *Smile*

I thought the enjambents {lines that flow to the next} were effective and words chosen for the Key Capitals were awesome. Concepts like "returning" "injecting" etc so qualify the nature of the month.
I really like the idea of "inject" as spring has to push with might and energy to impulse new growth.


My only little glitch would be that you used "new lives" twice pretty close together---kind of like repeating an idea. Maybe something to add variety or a different phrasing to show the specific idea. *Wink* Same with the idea of "itself" thought I think you can simply drop the word from line two as we get the idea. Still the commentary is clear and the form well composed and well thought out! *Star*

Thanks for the tribute to the Foolery of April! *Starstruck* I had fun with the vision.

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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