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Soft whispers Jack's last frigid gasp  [E]
Prompt - Spring Sanita's Newbies Only Poetry Contest {bitem:1968082}
by Don't Care
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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I thought at first you were talking about a dog waking up from his nap. Then I realized you were talking about a bear; the tree bark stripping clued me in. lol

I had to look up the word 'maunder'. So thanks for the extra education.

When I read the 'leaps and bounds' I thought of deer. But deer don't hibernate, so hmmm...

I wasn't sure where the poem ended. You had more stuff at the bottom that just didn't fit with the poem. I It's a list of other poems, you might want to put some dashes or something to separate the poem from the rest. If that is more poem, it just messed me up.

The part that I thought was poem, gave good mental imaging. Spring has sprung!

love, LinnAnn
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