Hi G. B. Williams ,I found your writing ad random. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit.


On Title/Subject
Counting my blessings, Thoughts from today's adventure
is a good title and sums up its content. I had to think twice on the use of the word 'adventure' but after reading several times I got what you meant. The adventure is the acknowledgment of what your family is doing and has done for you. That covers a daily adventure indeed.

General impressions
I liked this thank you-i love you note to your family. They are spending time, effort, action and belief in you as their father and grandfather. The fact that you do remember, appreciate and thank them for all they do makes you a very nice family member and a really kind person.

The summing up in the first part of your essay is somewhat hindering the pace of this piece of writing.

The love, The time, The many breakfasts, The daily check, The frequent little gifts, Attendance, Appreciating, Driving it is a lot of summery without involving yourself in the first person singular.


I like it very much when you say: Most of all, thank you for checking on me at night when I am fast asleep and gently kissing me on my cheek. You make it more personal with that line.

It has a beginning, a middle and an lovely ending with that poem. Give Me My Flowers/Roses While I can Smell Them. Very tender, little poem.


Suggestions
Maybe you could make the first half more personal by not only summarize what they are doing but incorporate that summery into something just a little more personal?


Final thoughts
Sometimes we forget to count our blessings. Many times we take our blessings for granted. Often times, we do not recognize our blessings. In any case, we fail to acknowledge the gift that we have been given. You have proved your own words wrong. You do count your blessings. I hope you will be in the position to enjoy this blessing for years to come.

I find this essay a lovely way of showing how much you all care for eachother. It's subdued in tone but always fresh. A nice read for all of your family, and for WDC aswell. Thank you for sharing.



Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

Wies Blaize.