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 | Stone Is The Flower  [E] A weird poem that came to me after seeing some fossil flowers at a science museum  |
| (5.0)| Hiya Foster! Your wonderful poem popped up on random reads. Lucky me.   Personal Impression:Wow! I really enjoyed this fascinating poem with its original theme. The first 3 line image intrigued and engaged my imagination. It was lovely to read aloud as well. The story of the natural rock cycle and this "frozen flower" is well conceived and logical. I felt the appreciative tone for the process and the wonder of this flowers' preservation and existence throughout.  Conventions:It was a delight to read down the page and aloud. Your use of consonance, assonance and alliteration are so effective that I was lured to reread several times to enjoy the brilliance. eg.the a in "circumstances", "masses", long e and d in "bleed", and dreamed". I loved "instantly incinerating" as it flowed like fire. The vocabulary was well chosen for theme and flow. The images are vivid and flowed from your how and why question at the start. It is almost sad when you say it sits on a shelf now and it doesn't belong to you. I did not notice a specific rhythm but I enjoyed reading the short free flow of the work. it felt like a reflection and yet told about earth processes.  The personification of the stone/flower was brilliant. It "dreamed", "did it bleed"! Grammar/Punctuation:The short lines and phrasings were coherent to me in spite of lack of punctuation. I often have written in such a way. I wonder if others find it as easy to know when to pause and catch your drift. I do think he way you place your lines do act as pauses and make comprehension accessible. I wonder if some well placed punctuation would add potency---the dramatic pause etc. I admired your impressive expression!Thanks for sharing your vision!  Write on!eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable ** "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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