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Spanking Fanny  [GC]
A mail order bride and her cowboy beau get off to a rocky start.
by Mara ♣ McBain
Review of Spanking Fanny  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose - REOPE...  
Rated: GC | (5.0)
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Review of Spanking Fanny

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review is being given as a requirement for the Game of Thrones contest.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Since I write erotica myself I was pleasantly surprised when I found some short erotic stories tucked away in your portfolio. I choose this one because the title appealed to me. The story is definitely a slice of time taken from the period of the development of the old west in the United States. Since the was a first place winner in the Weekly Quickie Contest I expect it would be a quality story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

You jump right into the plot and that gets the reader firmly absorbed into the story line. What greater affront can a woman deal with than to be left standing alone at the altar on her wedding day. You handled the fury that Franchesca felt in her very being as she trudges down the dusty road.

In short comments we find Fanny has come from New York to Nevada to marry Adam Kingston who seems a little inconsiderate. After a short verbal sparing he pulls the fleeing woman up over the crest of his saddle where lifting her skirts he spanks her on her bare bottom. This is where the story changes. Because of this action she knows that he loves her because he cares.

The story changes here. No longer is she running away. he places her hands on his growing erection and quickly finds a quiet place where the two can share in a passionate love making.

You handled the erotic details very sensitively showing the passion and sexuality without giving too much detail.

From this point the story moves quickly to the happy ending both of the characters deserve.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I wasn't too sure about where you were going with the Italian theme. I noted it and wondered if you wanted to strengthen that but having the Weekly Quickie word limit of 869 pending you did not finish your thoughts on this subject.


FINAL THOUGHTS:

This was a good story. The Weekly Quickie contest is still running every week. i would enjoy reading some of your new material.

dblameck





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